IELTS Writing : Same question, two answers

(아이엘츠 라이팅 강좌 #5 : TASK 1 같은 질문, 두 가지 모범답안)

참조 : ielts-simon.com

 아이엘츠 캠브리지 5권에 나오는 아이엘츠 라이팅 파트 1 문제다. 그래프와 테이블 위주로 테스크 1을 준비해왔다면 충분히 당황할 수 있는 유형의 문제.

 두 라이팅을 분석하면 모두 4개의 문단으로 글을 구성하였으며, 두 에세이 모두 첫번째 문단은 질문을 paraphrasing 하여 맵이 무엇을 보여주고 있는지, 두번째 문단은 주된 차이점(Main differences)을 서술하였다.

차이점은,

 Eassy 1 에서는 세번째 문단은 S1과 S2를 위치(Location)에 대해, 네번째 문단은 도로, 철로, 다른 도시와의 접근성에 대해 S1과 S2를 동시에 언급하면서 비교하였다.

그에 비해

 Eassy 2 에서는 세번째 문단에서는 S1에 대해서만, 네번째 문단에서는 S2에 대해서만 나눠서 서술하였다.

 두 에세이 모두 밴드 9에 해당하는 완벽한 모범 에세이니 철저하게 분석하여 소화하기 바란다.

Essay 1

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 The map shows two potential locations (S1 and S2) for a new supermarket in a town called Garlsdon.

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 The main difference between the two sites is that S1 is outside the town, whereas S2 is in the town centre. The sites can also be compared in terms of access by road or rail, and their positions relative to three smaller towns.

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 Looking at the information in more detail, S1 is in the countryside to the north west of Garlsdon, but it is close to the residential area of the town. S2 is also close to the housing area, which surrounds the town centre.

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 There are main roads from Hindon, Bransdon and Cransdon to Garlsdon town centre, but this is a no traffic zone, so there would be no access to S2 by car. By contrast, S1 lies on the main road to Hindon, but it would be more difficult to reach from Bransdon and Cransdon. Both supermarket sites are close to the railway that runs through Garlsdon from Hindon to Cransdon.

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​(171 words, band 9)

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Essay 2

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 The map compares two potential locations for the building of a new supermarket in a town called Garlsdon.

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 The main difference between the two sites is that one is located in the countryside outside the town, whereas the other is in the town centre. Both potential sites are close to the railway, and reasonably near to a main road.

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 The first possible site for the supermarket (S1) is located in an area of countryside to the north west of Garlsdon. It is close to the railway line and to a main road connecting Garlsdon to the smaller town of Hindon. It is also situated near to the residential housing area of Garlsdon.

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 The second site (S2), by contrast, is in Garlsdon town centre. It is also accessible by rail, but not by road because the town centre is a no-traffic zone. Despite this, the main roads to Cransdon, Bransdon and Hindon are not too far away. The distance to Garlsdon’s housing area is similar to the distance from S1 to the same area.

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(174 words, band 9)