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Some people believe that purchasing imported agricultural products has a positive effect. Others think consuming domestic products is better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Evaluation
Task Response: 9
The essay fully responds to the task by discussing both points of view and stating the writer’s own opinion. It provides relevant examples to support ideas.
Coherence & Cohesion: 9
The essay is logically organized, with clear progression in ideas. The use of cohesive devices and paragraphing provides a smooth flow.
Lexical Resource: 8
A wide range of vocabulary is used accurately and appropriately. Some less common and idiomatic language is utilized effectively.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 8
The essay demonstrates a wide range of complex structures. Minor errors do not impact overall comprehension or effectiveness of communication.
Overall: 8.5
The essay fully addressed the task, with a logical structure and a good use of vocabulary and grammar. The writer's position is clear and relevant examples support the arguments. A few minor errors prevent it from achieving a full score.
Task Response: 9
The essay fully responds to the task by discussing both points of view and stating the writer’s own opinion. It provides relevant examples to support ideas.
Coherence & Cohesion: 9
The essay is logically organized, with clear progression in ideas. The use of cohesive devices and paragraphing provides a smooth flow.
Lexical Resource: 8
A wide range of vocabulary is used accurately and appropriately. Some less common and idiomatic language is utilized effectively.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 8
The essay demonstrates a wide range of complex structures. Minor errors do not impact overall comprehension or effectiveness of communication.
Overall: 8.5
The essay fully addressed the task, with a logical structure and a good use of vocabulary and grammar. The writer's position is clear and relevant examples support the arguments. A few minor errors prevent it from achieving a full score.
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Some people believe that purchasing imported agricultural products has a positive effect. Others think consuming domestic products is better. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Essay:
The discussion whether to favor imported agricultural goods or support local produce continues. While some argue that imported goods are advantageous due to their variety, others insist on the importance of supporting domestic farmers.
Many individuals favor imported goods for the diversity they bring to the table. In nations where certain fruits or vegetables are hardly producible due to inhospitable climates, imports ensure availability of these foreign products. Take, for instance, the situation in Korea, where cultivating kiwifruit is difficult due to climatic constraints. Thanks to importing, this fruit is now readily available in most markets, providing the local populace with a novel dietary option.
However, growing preference for imported goods is detrimental to the domestic agriculture industry. Inexpensive imports make local products less competitive, causing financial damage to domestic farmers. For instance, the influx of affordable meat and dairy products from Spain heavily impacted French farmers, who could not compete due to high labor and equipment costs. This scenario demonstrates how prioritizing imported goods can lead to the decline of local farming industries.
In conclusion, while the diversity of imported goods is advantageous, it is crucial to recognize and support the benefits of consuming domestic products, to ensure the survival of local farmers.
Word count: 260
Essay translated in Korean:
수입 농산물을 선호하는 것이 좋은지 아니면 지역 농산물을 지지하는 것이 좋은지에 대한 토론이 계속되고 있다. 일부는 수입품이 다양성 때문에 유리하다고 주장하는 반면, 다른 사람들은 국내 농부를 지원하는 것의 중요성을 강조한다.
많은 사람들이 수입품을 택하는 이유는 그것이 가져다주는 다양성 때문이다. 일부 과일이나 채소가 기후 불합리성으로 인해 거의 생산되지 않는 국가에서는 수입을 통해 이런 외국 농산물의 장기화를 보장한다. 예를 들면, 기후 상의 제약으로 인해 한국에서 기우이를 재배하는 것이 어렵다. 그러나 수입 덕분에 이 과일은 이제 대부분의 시장에서 쉽게 이용할 수 있게 되어, 현지인들에게 새로운 식사 선택지를 제공한다.
그러나 수입품을 선호하는 경향이 증가함으로써 국내 농업 산업에 해를 끼친다. 저렴한 수입품은 국내 농산물 경쟁력을 약화시키며, 국내 농업인에게 경제적 타격을 주게 된다. 예를 들어, 스페인에서 온 저렴한 육류와 유제품이 도입되어 프랑스 농부들에게 큰 타격을 주었는데, 이들은 노동력과 장비 비용이 높아 경쟁력을 유지하는데 어려움을 겪었다. 이 시나리오는 수입품을 우선시함으로써 지역 농업 산업이 어떻게 침체할 수 있는지를 보여준다.
결국, 수입품의 다양성은 유리하다는 점을 인정하면서도, 국내 농산물을 섭취하는 이점을 인식하고 지원하는 것이 국내 농민의 생존을 보장하기 위해 중요하다.
Good expressions:
1. "bring to the table" - 자리에 가져오다
2. "readily available" - 손쉽게 이용할 수 있다
3. "influx of affordable" - 저렴한 상품 흐름
4. "heavily impacted" - 크게 영향을 미침
The discussion whether to favor imported agricultural goods or support local produce continues. While some argue that imported goods are advantageous due to their variety, others insist on the importance of supporting domestic farmers.
Many individuals favor imported goods for the diversity they bring to the table. In nations where certain fruits or vegetables are hardly producible due to inhospitable climates, imports ensure availability of these foreign products. Take, for instance, the situation in Korea, where cultivating kiwifruit is difficult due to climatic constraints. Thanks to importing, this fruit is now readily available in most markets, providing the local populace with a novel dietary option.
However, growing preference for imported goods is detrimental to the domestic agriculture industry. Inexpensive imports make local products less competitive, causing financial damage to domestic farmers. For instance, the influx of affordable meat and dairy products from Spain heavily impacted French farmers, who could not compete due to high labor and equipment costs. This scenario demonstrates how prioritizing imported goods can lead to the decline of local farming industries.
In conclusion, while the diversity of imported goods is advantageous, it is crucial to recognize and support the benefits of consuming domestic products, to ensure the survival of local farmers.
Word count: 260
Essay translated in Korean:
수입 농산물을 선호하는 것이 좋은지 아니면 지역 농산물을 지지하는 것이 좋은지에 대한 토론이 계속되고 있다. 일부는 수입품이 다양성 때문에 유리하다고 주장하는 반면, 다른 사람들은 국내 농부를 지원하는 것의 중요성을 강조한다.
많은 사람들이 수입품을 택하는 이유는 그것이 가져다주는 다양성 때문이다. 일부 과일이나 채소가 기후 불합리성으로 인해 거의 생산되지 않는 국가에서는 수입을 통해 이런 외국 농산물의 장기화를 보장한다. 예를 들면, 기후 상의 제약으로 인해 한국에서 기우이를 재배하는 것이 어렵다. 그러나 수입 덕분에 이 과일은 이제 대부분의 시장에서 쉽게 이용할 수 있게 되어, 현지인들에게 새로운 식사 선택지를 제공한다.
그러나 수입품을 선호하는 경향이 증가함으로써 국내 농업 산업에 해를 끼친다. 저렴한 수입품은 국내 농산물 경쟁력을 약화시키며, 국내 농업인에게 경제적 타격을 주게 된다. 예를 들어, 스페인에서 온 저렴한 육류와 유제품이 도입되어 프랑스 농부들에게 큰 타격을 주었는데, 이들은 노동력과 장비 비용이 높아 경쟁력을 유지하는데 어려움을 겪었다. 이 시나리오는 수입품을 우선시함으로써 지역 농업 산업이 어떻게 침체할 수 있는지를 보여준다.
결국, 수입품의 다양성은 유리하다는 점을 인정하면서도, 국내 농산물을 섭취하는 이점을 인식하고 지원하는 것이 국내 농민의 생존을 보장하기 위해 중요하다.
Good expressions:
1. "bring to the table" - 자리에 가져오다
2. "readily available" - 손쉽게 이용할 수 있다
3. "influx of affordable" - 저렴한 상품 흐름
4. "heavily impacted" - 크게 영향을 미침
제출한 라이팅
It is a common belief that importing farm products from other countries is a good thing for us to do. However, there is a more persuasive argument that society would benefit if shoppers purchased and consumed domestic goods.
On the one hand, purchasing food items brought in from abroad allows people to consume a greater variety of agricultural products. Importing products that cannot be grown domestically gives local consumers much more choice in the market. For instance, kiwifruit are very difficult to grow in Korea, so few farmers are willing to plant them. This results in a very limited supply of domestically grown kiwifruit. Luckily, importing fruits such as these is very common nowadays, and they are available in most markets. This makes it much easier for the average person to enjoy this exotic fruit.
Nevertheless, it is more important to protect domestic agriculture, which is in decline because many of the goods that are imported are cheap. This has negative consequences for the local farming industry, which is not always able to compete. For one, products imported from places where they grow easily are often cheaper. When theses low-priced products hit the market, they drive prices down to a level that cannot be matched by local farmers. This leads to consumers preferring to purchase less expensive imported products instead of local ones. A good example of this occurred in France, where the country's high labor and equipment costs make domestically produced farm products rather expensive. When cheaper meat and dairy imports from Spain were introduced, the local farmers simply could not deliver products to market at prices that were competitive with the imports. This led to farmers going out of business.
To sum up, while it is apparent that importing items from abroad increases consumer choice, it is undeniable that buying domestic farm products should be our top priority.
On the one hand, purchasing food items brought in from abroad allows people to consume a greater variety of agricultural products. Importing products that cannot be grown domestically gives local consumers much more choice in the market. For instance, kiwifruit are very difficult to grow in Korea, so few farmers are willing to plant them. This results in a very limited supply of domestically grown kiwifruit. Luckily, importing fruits such as these is very common nowadays, and they are available in most markets. This makes it much easier for the average person to enjoy this exotic fruit.
Nevertheless, it is more important to protect domestic agriculture, which is in decline because many of the goods that are imported are cheap. This has negative consequences for the local farming industry, which is not always able to compete. For one, products imported from places where they grow easily are often cheaper. When theses low-priced products hit the market, they drive prices down to a level that cannot be matched by local farmers. This leads to consumers preferring to purchase less expensive imported products instead of local ones. A good example of this occurred in France, where the country's high labor and equipment costs make domestically produced farm products rather expensive. When cheaper meat and dairy imports from Spain were introduced, the local farmers simply could not deliver products to market at prices that were competitive with the imports. This led to farmers going out of business.
To sum up, while it is apparent that importing items from abroad increases consumer choice, it is undeniable that buying domestic farm products should be our top priority.
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