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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these
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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these
Essay:
The role of innate capability versus learned skill has long been a source of debate in diverse fields. Certain segments argue that individuals are born with innate talents in various areas such as sports or music, while others opine that with adequate training and determination, anyone can excel in these fields. Both viewpoints merit consideration.
Proponents of innate talent posit that inherent abilities greatly determine success in specific domains. Some individuals demonstrate unique aptitudes from an early age, e.g., a prodigious pianist or an unusually agile footballer. These cases could not be solely attributed to rigorous training or hard work, suggesting that a certain degree of natural endowment holds significance. Mozart’s musical compositions at the age of five, for instance, validate this perspective.
Conversely, advocates for learned ability assert that with rigorous training, tenacity, and the right environment, anyone can develop into a proficient athlete or musician. Renowned violinist Leopold Auer once affirmed, "Practice with your fingers and you need all day. Practice with your mind and you will do as much in 1 1/2 hours." The belief is that through deliberate practice and nurture, any child could unlock their potential in areas such as sports or music, even if their initial aptitude appears mediocre.
In sum, it is plausible that innate talent provides an initial advantage, yet it is also clear that commitment, practice, and the right training can offer a path to achieving greatness. It is perhaps reasonable to conclude that an interplay between natural endowment and environment predict success more accurately than relying on either factor in isolation.
Word count: 261
Essay translated in Korean:
다양한 분야에서 본능적인 능력과 배운 기술의 역할은 오랫동안 논란의 여지가 있었습니다. 일부는 개인이 운동이나 음악과 같은 다양한 영역에서 본능적인 재능을 가지고 태어난다고 주장하는 반면, 다른 사람들은 적절한 훈련과 결단력이 있으면 누구나 이러한 분야에서 뛰어날 수 있다고 의견을 제시합니다. 두 견해 모두 고려할 가치가 있습니다.
Good expressions:
1. Proponents of innate talent - 본능적 재능을 지지하는 사람들
2. Unique aptitudes from an early age - 어린 시절부터의 독특한 소질
3. Practice with your mind - 마음을 다해 연습하다
4. Deliberate practice - 고의적인 연습
5. Predict success more accurately - 성공을 더 정확하게 예측하다
6. Advocates for learned ability - 배운 능력을 옹호하는 사람들
7. Interplay between natural endowment and environment - 천부적인 재능과 환경 사이의 상호작용
8. Rigorous training - 철저한 훈련
9. Tenacity and the right environment - 끈기와 적합한 환경
The role of innate capability versus learned skill has long been a source of debate in diverse fields. Certain segments argue that individuals are born with innate talents in various areas such as sports or music, while others opine that with adequate training and determination, anyone can excel in these fields. Both viewpoints merit consideration.
Proponents of innate talent posit that inherent abilities greatly determine success in specific domains. Some individuals demonstrate unique aptitudes from an early age, e.g., a prodigious pianist or an unusually agile footballer. These cases could not be solely attributed to rigorous training or hard work, suggesting that a certain degree of natural endowment holds significance. Mozart’s musical compositions at the age of five, for instance, validate this perspective.
Conversely, advocates for learned ability assert that with rigorous training, tenacity, and the right environment, anyone can develop into a proficient athlete or musician. Renowned violinist Leopold Auer once affirmed, "Practice with your fingers and you need all day. Practice with your mind and you will do as much in 1 1/2 hours." The belief is that through deliberate practice and nurture, any child could unlock their potential in areas such as sports or music, even if their initial aptitude appears mediocre.
In sum, it is plausible that innate talent provides an initial advantage, yet it is also clear that commitment, practice, and the right training can offer a path to achieving greatness. It is perhaps reasonable to conclude that an interplay between natural endowment and environment predict success more accurately than relying on either factor in isolation.
Word count: 261
Essay translated in Korean:
다양한 분야에서 본능적인 능력과 배운 기술의 역할은 오랫동안 논란의 여지가 있었습니다. 일부는 개인이 운동이나 음악과 같은 다양한 영역에서 본능적인 재능을 가지고 태어난다고 주장하는 반면, 다른 사람들은 적절한 훈련과 결단력이 있으면 누구나 이러한 분야에서 뛰어날 수 있다고 의견을 제시합니다. 두 견해 모두 고려할 가치가 있습니다.
Good expressions:
1. Proponents of innate talent - 본능적 재능을 지지하는 사람들
2. Unique aptitudes from an early age - 어린 시절부터의 독특한 소질
3. Practice with your mind - 마음을 다해 연습하다
4. Deliberate practice - 고의적인 연습
5. Predict success more accurately - 성공을 더 정확하게 예측하다
6. Advocates for learned ability - 배운 능력을 옹호하는 사람들
7. Interplay between natural endowment and environment - 천부적인 재능과 환경 사이의 상호작용
8. Rigorous training - 철저한 훈련
9. Tenacity and the right environment - 끈기와 적합한 환경
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