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Some people say that the Internet will soon become the preferred method of delivery of news and information, causing newspapers and magazines to gradually disappear. Do you agree or disagree?
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Evaluation
Task Response: 6
The essay adequately addresses the task and presents both sides of the argument – those preferring the traditional newspapers and magazines and those favoring the Internet for news and information. However, the writer's own position lacks clarity in some places, and could have been more decisively expressed and explained.
Coherence & Cohesion: 6
The essay is mostly organized logically with clear progression of ideas. There are some linking words and cohesive devices, but the use of cohesive devices is inconsistent and the essay lacks a clear overall flow.
Lexical Resource: 7
The candidate has shown a good range of vocabulary with phrases like 'tactile experience', 'certain demographics' or 'preferred way of information delivery'. However, there are some inappropriate word choices and collocations such as 'get some interests' instead of 'gain some interests,' and 'leads to obtain knowledge' rather than 'tends to obtain knowledge,' which affect the precision of the message.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 5
The writer has used a range of grammatical structures, but there are noticeable punctuation errors and incorrect use of articles ('a' and 'the'), as well as inappropriate use of certain words and phrases, leading to awkward sentences which may confuse the reader.
Overall: 6
The essay meets the requirements of the task to a satisfactory extent, with the arguments clearly presented and supported by relevant examples. However, awkward sentences and occasional lack of clarity could make it difficult for the reader to fully understand the writer's points. Also, more attention to detail in grammar and vocabulary use would help better convey the ideas of the essay.
Task Response: 6
The essay adequately addresses the task and presents both sides of the argument – those preferring the traditional newspapers and magazines and those favoring the Internet for news and information. However, the writer's own position lacks clarity in some places, and could have been more decisively expressed and explained.
Coherence & Cohesion: 6
The essay is mostly organized logically with clear progression of ideas. There are some linking words and cohesive devices, but the use of cohesive devices is inconsistent and the essay lacks a clear overall flow.
Lexical Resource: 7
The candidate has shown a good range of vocabulary with phrases like 'tactile experience', 'certain demographics' or 'preferred way of information delivery'. However, there are some inappropriate word choices and collocations such as 'get some interests' instead of 'gain some interests,' and 'leads to obtain knowledge' rather than 'tends to obtain knowledge,' which affect the precision of the message.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 5
The writer has used a range of grammatical structures, but there are noticeable punctuation errors and incorrect use of articles ('a' and 'the'), as well as inappropriate use of certain words and phrases, leading to awkward sentences which may confuse the reader.
Overall: 6
The essay meets the requirements of the task to a satisfactory extent, with the arguments clearly presented and supported by relevant examples. However, awkward sentences and occasional lack of clarity could make it difficult for the reader to fully understand the writer's points. Also, more attention to detail in grammar and vocabulary use would help better convey the ideas of the essay.
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Some people say that the Internet will soon become the preferred method of delivery of news and information, causing newspapers and magazines to gradually disappear.
Do you agree or disagree?
Essay:
Introduction: There is a popular opinion that the Internet will soon become the chief source of news and information, replacing traditional newspapers and magazines. The following essay explores both sides of this argument, while also providing my personal viewpoint.
Main paragraph 1: Traditional print media like newspapers and magazines still have a loyal base of supporters. These people appreciate and derive satisfaction from the tactile experience of handling a physical copy, which includes the act of flipping through pages. This is particularly true for older demographics, who find comfort and familiarity in the print medium. This generational connection has contributed significantly to the persistence of newspapers and magazines to date.
Main paragraph 2: In contrast, it cannot be denied that the Internet is increasingly becoming the popular choice for disseminating news and information. The Internet satisfies the modern need for quick and easy accessibility to news. A study conducted by the Korea University Student Foundation found that approximately 90% of students utilize the Internet for their academic research. Additionally, the rise of recommendation algorithms allows users to customize their news feed, making the Internet a highly attractive platform for information retrieval. This situation makes it quite persuasive that the Internet will soon outrank traditional media.
Conclusion: In conclusion, despite the sentimental value of traditional print, the popularity and convenience of the Internet make it likely that it will soon become the dominant source of news and information distribution.
Word count: 264 words
Essay translated in Korean:
서론: 인터넷이 곧 뉴스와 정보의 주요 출처가 될 것이라는 인기있는 견해가 있습니다. 이 에세이는 이 논란의 양면을 탐색하면서 나의 개인적인 견해도 제공합니다.
본문1: 신문과 잡지와 같은 전통적인 인쇄 매체는 여전히 충실한 지지자들을 보유하고 있습니다. 이 사람들은 페이지를 넘기는 행위를 포함한 실물 복사본을 다루는 촉각적 경험을 평가하고 만족시킵니다. 이것은 특히 인쇄 매체에 대한 편안함과 친숙함을 찾는 노년층에게 특히 사실입니다. 이러한 세대 간 연결은 신문과 잡지의 지속성에 상당히 기여했습니다.
본문2: 반면에 인터넷이 뉴스와 정보를 전파하는 인기 선택으로 점점 더 자리잡고 있다는 것을 부인할 수 없습니다. 인터넷은 빠르고 쉽게 뉴스를 접근할 수 있는 현대의 필요성을 충족시킵니다. 한국대학생재단에서 실시한 연구에 따르면 학생의 약 90%가 학문적 연구를 위해 인터넷을 활용합니다. 또한 추천 알고리즘의 부상으로 사용자는 뉴스 피드를 맞춤화할 수 있어 인터넷을 매우 매력적인 정보 검색 플랫폼으로 만듭니다. 이런 상황은 인터넷이 곧 전통 미디어보다 높은 순위를 차지할 것이라는 매우 설득력 있는 상황을 만듭니다.
결론: 결국, 전통 인쇄에 대한 감상적 가치에도 불구하고, 인터넷의 인기와 편리성으로 인해 이는 곧 뉴스와 정보 배포의 주요 원천이 될 가능성이 큽니다.
Good expressions:
1. chief source of news and information - 뉴스와 정보의 주요 출처
2. generational connection - 세대 간 연결
3. quick and easy accessibility - 빠르고 쉽게 접근할 수 있음
4. customize their news feed - 뉴스 피드를 맞춤화
5. sentimental value - 감상적 가치
Introduction: There is a popular opinion that the Internet will soon become the chief source of news and information, replacing traditional newspapers and magazines. The following essay explores both sides of this argument, while also providing my personal viewpoint.
Main paragraph 1: Traditional print media like newspapers and magazines still have a loyal base of supporters. These people appreciate and derive satisfaction from the tactile experience of handling a physical copy, which includes the act of flipping through pages. This is particularly true for older demographics, who find comfort and familiarity in the print medium. This generational connection has contributed significantly to the persistence of newspapers and magazines to date.
Main paragraph 2: In contrast, it cannot be denied that the Internet is increasingly becoming the popular choice for disseminating news and information. The Internet satisfies the modern need for quick and easy accessibility to news. A study conducted by the Korea University Student Foundation found that approximately 90% of students utilize the Internet for their academic research. Additionally, the rise of recommendation algorithms allows users to customize their news feed, making the Internet a highly attractive platform for information retrieval. This situation makes it quite persuasive that the Internet will soon outrank traditional media.
Conclusion: In conclusion, despite the sentimental value of traditional print, the popularity and convenience of the Internet make it likely that it will soon become the dominant source of news and information distribution.
Word count: 264 words
Essay translated in Korean:
서론: 인터넷이 곧 뉴스와 정보의 주요 출처가 될 것이라는 인기있는 견해가 있습니다. 이 에세이는 이 논란의 양면을 탐색하면서 나의 개인적인 견해도 제공합니다.
본문1: 신문과 잡지와 같은 전통적인 인쇄 매체는 여전히 충실한 지지자들을 보유하고 있습니다. 이 사람들은 페이지를 넘기는 행위를 포함한 실물 복사본을 다루는 촉각적 경험을 평가하고 만족시킵니다. 이것은 특히 인쇄 매체에 대한 편안함과 친숙함을 찾는 노년층에게 특히 사실입니다. 이러한 세대 간 연결은 신문과 잡지의 지속성에 상당히 기여했습니다.
본문2: 반면에 인터넷이 뉴스와 정보를 전파하는 인기 선택으로 점점 더 자리잡고 있다는 것을 부인할 수 없습니다. 인터넷은 빠르고 쉽게 뉴스를 접근할 수 있는 현대의 필요성을 충족시킵니다. 한국대학생재단에서 실시한 연구에 따르면 학생의 약 90%가 학문적 연구를 위해 인터넷을 활용합니다. 또한 추천 알고리즘의 부상으로 사용자는 뉴스 피드를 맞춤화할 수 있어 인터넷을 매우 매력적인 정보 검색 플랫폼으로 만듭니다. 이런 상황은 인터넷이 곧 전통 미디어보다 높은 순위를 차지할 것이라는 매우 설득력 있는 상황을 만듭니다.
결론: 결국, 전통 인쇄에 대한 감상적 가치에도 불구하고, 인터넷의 인기와 편리성으로 인해 이는 곧 뉴스와 정보 배포의 주요 원천이 될 가능성이 큽니다.
Good expressions:
1. chief source of news and information - 뉴스와 정보의 주요 출처
2. generational connection - 세대 간 연결
3. quick and easy accessibility - 빠르고 쉽게 접근할 수 있음
4. customize their news feed - 뉴스 피드를 맞춤화
5. sentimental value - 감상적 가치
제출한 라이팅
It is generally acknowledged by certain individual that the Internet will be one of best way to get some information and news rather than newspapers that they are going to disappear. In this essay, I will discuss both perspectives and express my own opinion.
On the one hand, individuals who love to read newspapers and magazines prefer to get some interests that they provide from print media. They enjoy the tactile experience of holding a psycial paper things such as flipping through pages. Moreover, certain demographics, such as older generations, may feel more comfortable and nostalgic with newspapers and magazines, further contributing to their preference for print media
On the other hand, it is undeniable factor that the Internet will be the preferred way of information delivery. This is because people desire to get some news too easily. Additionally, individual leads to obtain knowledges quickly on the Internet that there are uncountably information and facts. For instance, a survey conducted by Korea University Student Foundation revealed that nearly 90% of students rely on the Internet getting some information for their homework. Furthermore, people can choose their own categories of interest, since algorithms have emerged. Thus, the Internet is going to the most popular way of finding some news and information. I also strongly believe that this assertion.
In conclusion, while some people still prefer traditional methods like newspapers and magazines that giving some interests and feeling comfortable, searching on the Internet is becoming increasingly common. I also only partially agree with this assertion that the Internet is more popular way of delivery of news and information.
On the one hand, individuals who love to read newspapers and magazines prefer to get some interests that they provide from print media. They enjoy the tactile experience of holding a psycial paper things such as flipping through pages. Moreover, certain demographics, such as older generations, may feel more comfortable and nostalgic with newspapers and magazines, further contributing to their preference for print media
On the other hand, it is undeniable factor that the Internet will be the preferred way of information delivery. This is because people desire to get some news too easily. Additionally, individual leads to obtain knowledges quickly on the Internet that there are uncountably information and facts. For instance, a survey conducted by Korea University Student Foundation revealed that nearly 90% of students rely on the Internet getting some information for their homework. Furthermore, people can choose their own categories of interest, since algorithms have emerged. Thus, the Internet is going to the most popular way of finding some news and information. I also strongly believe that this assertion.
In conclusion, while some people still prefer traditional methods like newspapers and magazines that giving some interests and feeling comfortable, searching on the Internet is becoming increasingly common. I also only partially agree with this assertion that the Internet is more popular way of delivery of news and information.
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