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The chart below gives information about Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015, and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Evaluation
Task Response: 8
The student fully addresses all parts of the task. The main features of the chart have been identified and discussed, with a clear overview given. Quantitative data is included to support the points raised.
Coherence & Cohesion: 7.5
The information is organized logically, and there is clear progression of ideas throughout the text. The writer uses an appropriate range of cohesive devices, but could have utilized a wider variety to link the trends together.
Lexical Resource: 7
The candidate makes uses of a good mix of vocabulary to describe the trend but could have proposed more diverse terms to avoid repetition.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 8
There is a nice mix of different grammatical structures and the sentences are generally free from grammatical errors. Some more complex structures could have been deployed for a higher score.
Overall: 7.6
Task Response: 8
The student fully addresses all parts of the task. The main features of the chart have been identified and discussed, with a clear overview given. Quantitative data is included to support the points raised.
Coherence & Cohesion: 7.5
The information is organized logically, and there is clear progression of ideas throughout the text. The writer uses an appropriate range of cohesive devices, but could have utilized a wider variety to link the trends together.
Lexical Resource: 7
The candidate makes uses of a good mix of vocabulary to describe the trend but could have proposed more diverse terms to avoid repetition.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 8
There is a nice mix of different grammatical structures and the sentences are generally free from grammatical errors. Some more complex structures could have been deployed for a higher score.
Overall: 7.6
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The chart below gives information about Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015, and future projections for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Essay:
The bar chart elaborates on the export patterns of Someland in the years 2005, 2015 and forecasts for 2025. It is striking to note that international tourism remains the most consistent and increasing contributor to the country's export sector.
Meat exports, one of Someland's export commodities, witnessed a decline from $4 billion in 2005 to $3.5 billion in 2015. This trend is anticipated to continue till 2025, with a further significant reduction in meat exports. In contrast, the dairy industry reported a substantial elevation, skyrocketing from $1.5 billion in 2005 to $5 billion in 2015. However, by 2025, it is expected that this industry will experience a slight decrease.
The tourism industry of Someland, the chart reveals, is the biggest earning sector in export. From 2005, tourism was worth an approximated $7 billion, reaching its peak as the biggest moneymaker for Someland's export sector. Looking forward, projections indicate that by 2025, it is anticipated to accomplish near around $8 billion, further securing its position leading in the exports of Someland.
In conclusion, among the various export sectors of Someland, international tourism is the only sector showing a consistent growth, reinforcing its crucial role in the economy of the nation.
Word count: 206
Essay translated in Korean:
막대 그래프는 2005년, 2015년, 2025년의 Someland의 수출 패턴을 상세히 설명하고 있습니다. 국제 관광이 가장 일관되게 증가하는 수출 부문의 기여도를 유지하고 있는 것이 두드러집니다.
고기 수출, Someland의 수출 품목 중 하나는 2005년에 40억 달러에서 2015년에는 35억 달러로 감소하였습니다. 이 경향은 2025년까지 계속되며, 고기 수출에서 더욱 뚜렷한 감소가 예상됩니다. 반면으로, 유제품 산업은 2005년 15억 달러에서 2015년에는 50억 달러로 크게 증가하였습니다. 그러나, 2025년까지 이 산업에서는 약간의 감소가 있을 것으로 예상됩니다.
막대 그래프는 Someland의 관광 산업이 수출 부문에서 가장 큰 수익을 내는 부문임을 보여줍니다. 2005년부터, 관광은 약 70억 달러의 가치가 있었으며, 이로써 Someland의 수출 부문에서 가장 큰 돈벌이로 자리매김하였습니다. 전망치를 살펴보면, 2025년까지 약 80억 달러를 달성할 것으로 예상되며, 이로 인해 수출부문에서는 더욱 강세를 보이게 될 것입니다.
결론적으로, Someland의 여러 수출 부문 중에서 국제 관광 부문만이 지속적으로 성장하고 있으며, 이는 이 국가의 경제에서 중요한 역할을 강화하고 있습니다.
Good expressions:
1. It is striking to note - 유의할 점은 ()
2. substantial elevation, skyrocketing from - 상당한 상승, 급증하다 ()
3. reaching its peak - 정점에 이르다 ()
4. securing its position - 그들의 위치를 확보하다 ()
5. reinforcing its crucial role - 핵심 역할을 강화하다 ()
The bar chart elaborates on the export patterns of Someland in the years 2005, 2015 and forecasts for 2025. It is striking to note that international tourism remains the most consistent and increasing contributor to the country's export sector.
Meat exports, one of Someland's export commodities, witnessed a decline from $4 billion in 2005 to $3.5 billion in 2015. This trend is anticipated to continue till 2025, with a further significant reduction in meat exports. In contrast, the dairy industry reported a substantial elevation, skyrocketing from $1.5 billion in 2005 to $5 billion in 2015. However, by 2025, it is expected that this industry will experience a slight decrease.
The tourism industry of Someland, the chart reveals, is the biggest earning sector in export. From 2005, tourism was worth an approximated $7 billion, reaching its peak as the biggest moneymaker for Someland's export sector. Looking forward, projections indicate that by 2025, it is anticipated to accomplish near around $8 billion, further securing its position leading in the exports of Someland.
In conclusion, among the various export sectors of Someland, international tourism is the only sector showing a consistent growth, reinforcing its crucial role in the economy of the nation.
Word count: 206
Essay translated in Korean:
막대 그래프는 2005년, 2015년, 2025년의 Someland의 수출 패턴을 상세히 설명하고 있습니다. 국제 관광이 가장 일관되게 증가하는 수출 부문의 기여도를 유지하고 있는 것이 두드러집니다.
고기 수출, Someland의 수출 품목 중 하나는 2005년에 40억 달러에서 2015년에는 35억 달러로 감소하였습니다. 이 경향은 2025년까지 계속되며, 고기 수출에서 더욱 뚜렷한 감소가 예상됩니다. 반면으로, 유제품 산업은 2005년 15억 달러에서 2015년에는 50억 달러로 크게 증가하였습니다. 그러나, 2025년까지 이 산업에서는 약간의 감소가 있을 것으로 예상됩니다.
막대 그래프는 Someland의 관광 산업이 수출 부문에서 가장 큰 수익을 내는 부문임을 보여줍니다. 2005년부터, 관광은 약 70억 달러의 가치가 있었으며, 이로써 Someland의 수출 부문에서 가장 큰 돈벌이로 자리매김하였습니다. 전망치를 살펴보면, 2025년까지 약 80억 달러를 달성할 것으로 예상되며, 이로 인해 수출부문에서는 더욱 강세를 보이게 될 것입니다.
결론적으로, Someland의 여러 수출 부문 중에서 국제 관광 부문만이 지속적으로 성장하고 있으며, 이는 이 국가의 경제에서 중요한 역할을 강화하고 있습니다.
Good expressions:
1. It is striking to note - 유의할 점은 ()
2. substantial elevation, skyrocketing from - 상당한 상승, 급증하다 ()
3. reaching its peak - 정점에 이르다 ()
4. securing its position - 그들의 위치를 확보하다 ()
5. reinforcing its crucial role - 핵심 역할을 강화하다 ()
제출한 라이팅
The bar chart presents data regarding the export market of Someland in 2005, 2015 and predicted export data for 2025. Overall, what stands out from the bar chart is that international tourism is the only Someland export that has been and will continue to be a growing sector of the Someland economy.
Someland's international sales of meats reduced from $4 billion in 2005 to approximately 3.5 billion US dollars in 2015. Roughly the same reduction is expected to occur from 2015 to 2025. There was a massive increase of almost 3.5 billion dollars in the export of dairy products between 2005 and 2015, though a small decrease in dairy sold in foreign markets is anticipated by 2025. The only Someland product sold abroad that has and is predicted to increase over the full twenty year period is international tourism. It was by far the Someland's biggest export in 2005, being worth around 7 billion USD that year, and will be worth close to 8 billion dollars by 2025.
Someland's international sales of meats reduced from $4 billion in 2005 to approximately 3.5 billion US dollars in 2015. Roughly the same reduction is expected to occur from 2015 to 2025. There was a massive increase of almost 3.5 billion dollars in the export of dairy products between 2005 and 2015, though a small decrease in dairy sold in foreign markets is anticipated by 2025. The only Someland product sold abroad that has and is predicted to increase over the full twenty year period is international tourism. It was by far the Someland's biggest export in 2005, being worth around 7 billion USD that year, and will be worth close to 8 billion dollars by 2025.
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