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- Discussion
In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smartphones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?
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Evaluation
Task Response: 7
The essay successfully addresses the task of weighing the pros and cons of working from home, with a clear position and relevant examples. It would be improved with a more complex discussion of the task elements, perhaps considering the varying impacts on different types of workers or industries.
Coherence & Cohesion: 7
The writer maintains a logical order and uses appropriate signaling language to guide the reader. Introduction, body and conclusion parts are clearly identifiable. However, some of the transitions could be smoother, and the essay may benefit from better structured arguments within the body paragraphs.
Lexical Resource: 8
The writer demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, using less common words and phrases without any noticeable awkwardness. There is a good use of words that correspond to the topic (e.g., "commute, employees, residence, self-employed"). However, slight repetition ("self-motivation can be difficult") can be avoided with the use of synonyms.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 7
Sentences exhibit variety in length and structure. There are no major grammatical errors; however, there are some minor issues ('they can enjoy the hygienic comforts of your own bathroom' – inconsistent pronoun use). More complex and varied grammatical constructions would improve this score further.
Overall: 7.25
The essay generally accomplishes the task and demonstrates a good command of language, but improvements could be made in coherence and cohesion, as well as grammatical range and accuracy.
Task Response: 7
The essay successfully addresses the task of weighing the pros and cons of working from home, with a clear position and relevant examples. It would be improved with a more complex discussion of the task elements, perhaps considering the varying impacts on different types of workers or industries.
Coherence & Cohesion: 7
The writer maintains a logical order and uses appropriate signaling language to guide the reader. Introduction, body and conclusion parts are clearly identifiable. However, some of the transitions could be smoother, and the essay may benefit from better structured arguments within the body paragraphs.
Lexical Resource: 8
The writer demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, using less common words and phrases without any noticeable awkwardness. There is a good use of words that correspond to the topic (e.g., "commute, employees, residence, self-employed"). However, slight repetition ("self-motivation can be difficult") can be avoided with the use of synonyms.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 7
Sentences exhibit variety in length and structure. There are no major grammatical errors; however, there are some minor issues ('they can enjoy the hygienic comforts of your own bathroom' – inconsistent pronoun use). More complex and varied grammatical constructions would improve this score further.
Overall: 7.25
The essay generally accomplishes the task and demonstrates a good command of language, but improvements could be made in coherence and cohesion, as well as grammatical range and accuracy.
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In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smartphones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?
Essay:
The rapid increase in the use of computers, internet and smartphones has prompted a shift from traditional office work to home-based work. There are both advantages and disadvantages to this transition, which this essay will discuss.
A primary advantage of home-based work is the elimination of the commute, resulting in saved time and money, and the reduction in stress that often accompanies rush hour traffic. Another positive aspect is the tremendous potential for improved personal comfort - a significant example being the availability of one's own bathroom, dispelling hygiene concerns associated with sharing facilities.
Conversely, the two primary drawbacks of home-based work include a lack of managerial oversight and increased personal expense. Individuals working from home lack the corrective influence of managers, which can lead to decreased productivity due to potential distractions. Additionally, home-based workers bear the cost of heating, cooling, lighting and even cooking which would typically be absorbed by office spaces and employers.
In conclusion, while home-based work provides tangible benefits including saved time, personal comfort and privacy, it presents significant challenges in the shape of decreased productivity and increased personal expense. The decision to work from home should therefore be predicated on careful consideration of these factors.
Word count: 198
Essay translated in Korean:
컴퓨터, 인터넷 및 스마트폰의 사용량이 급증함에 따라 전통적인 사무실 업무에서 홈 베이스 된 일로 전환되었습니다. 이런 전환에는 장단점이 있으며, 이 논문에서는 그 결과를 논의하겠습니다.
홈베이스 된 일의 주요 장점 중 하나는 통근이 필요 없어지며 결과적으로 시간과 돈이 절약되고 러시아워에 수반되는 스트레스가 감소하는 것입니다. 또 다른 긍정적 측면은 개인의 편안함이 크게 향상될 수 있는 점인데, 공용 시설을 사용하는 데 관련된 위생 문제를 무시하고 본인의 화장실을 이용할 수 있다는 점이 대표적인 예입니다.
반면에, 홈베이스 된 일의 두 가지 주요한 단점은 관리자의 감독력 부족과 개인의 비용 증가입니다. 홈 베이스에서 일하는 사람들은 매니저의 바른 영향력이 부족하여 잠재적인 방해 요소로 인해 생산성이 떨어질 수 있습니다. 또한 홈베이스 된 근로자들은 사무실 공간과 고용주가 일반적으로 감내해야하는 난방, 냉각, 조명, 심지어 요리에 따른 비용을 부담하게 됩니다.
결론적으로, 홈베이스 된 일은 시간 절약, 개인적인 편안함 및 프라이버시 등 구체적인 이점을 제공하지만, 생산성 감소 및 개인적인 비용 증가와 같은 중요한 도전을 제시합니다. 따라서 집에서 일하는 결정은 이러한 요인들을 신중하게 고려한 후에 이루어져야 합니다.
Good expressions:
1. Elimination of the commute - 통근의 제거
2. Absorbed by office spaces and employers - 사무실 공간과 고용주가 감수하다
3. Predicated on careful consideration - 신중한 고려에 기반을 둔
4. Reduction in stress - 스트레스 감소
5. Decreased productivity due to potential distractions - 잠재적인 방해 요소로 인한 생산성 감소
The rapid increase in the use of computers, internet and smartphones has prompted a shift from traditional office work to home-based work. There are both advantages and disadvantages to this transition, which this essay will discuss.
A primary advantage of home-based work is the elimination of the commute, resulting in saved time and money, and the reduction in stress that often accompanies rush hour traffic. Another positive aspect is the tremendous potential for improved personal comfort - a significant example being the availability of one's own bathroom, dispelling hygiene concerns associated with sharing facilities.
Conversely, the two primary drawbacks of home-based work include a lack of managerial oversight and increased personal expense. Individuals working from home lack the corrective influence of managers, which can lead to decreased productivity due to potential distractions. Additionally, home-based workers bear the cost of heating, cooling, lighting and even cooking which would typically be absorbed by office spaces and employers.
In conclusion, while home-based work provides tangible benefits including saved time, personal comfort and privacy, it presents significant challenges in the shape of decreased productivity and increased personal expense. The decision to work from home should therefore be predicated on careful consideration of these factors.
Word count: 198
Essay translated in Korean:
컴퓨터, 인터넷 및 스마트폰의 사용량이 급증함에 따라 전통적인 사무실 업무에서 홈 베이스 된 일로 전환되었습니다. 이런 전환에는 장단점이 있으며, 이 논문에서는 그 결과를 논의하겠습니다.
홈베이스 된 일의 주요 장점 중 하나는 통근이 필요 없어지며 결과적으로 시간과 돈이 절약되고 러시아워에 수반되는 스트레스가 감소하는 것입니다. 또 다른 긍정적 측면은 개인의 편안함이 크게 향상될 수 있는 점인데, 공용 시설을 사용하는 데 관련된 위생 문제를 무시하고 본인의 화장실을 이용할 수 있다는 점이 대표적인 예입니다.
반면에, 홈베이스 된 일의 두 가지 주요한 단점은 관리자의 감독력 부족과 개인의 비용 증가입니다. 홈 베이스에서 일하는 사람들은 매니저의 바른 영향력이 부족하여 잠재적인 방해 요소로 인해 생산성이 떨어질 수 있습니다. 또한 홈베이스 된 근로자들은 사무실 공간과 고용주가 일반적으로 감내해야하는 난방, 냉각, 조명, 심지어 요리에 따른 비용을 부담하게 됩니다.
결론적으로, 홈베이스 된 일은 시간 절약, 개인적인 편안함 및 프라이버시 등 구체적인 이점을 제공하지만, 생산성 감소 및 개인적인 비용 증가와 같은 중요한 도전을 제시합니다. 따라서 집에서 일하는 결정은 이러한 요인들을 신중하게 고려한 후에 이루어져야 합니다.
Good expressions:
1. Elimination of the commute - 통근의 제거
2. Absorbed by office spaces and employers - 사무실 공간과 고용주가 감수하다
3. Predicated on careful consideration - 신중한 고려에 기반을 둔
4. Reduction in stress - 스트레스 감소
5. Decreased productivity due to potential distractions - 잠재적인 방해 요소로 인한 생산성 감소
제출한 라이팅
Prior to recent times, workers commuted to the location of their job, but due to the growing usage of computers, the internet and smartphones, a growing number of persons have begun to earn a living from their residence. There are some advantages to working from home, but a number of disadvantages also. In this essay, I will look at both the pros and cons of working where you reside.
There are two major advantages to earning your income from your own house. Firstly, you do not have to commute to work. This saves time and money, and allows you to avoid the stress of the morning rush hour. In the time saved on the commute, self-employed home workers can sleep in, which will ensure they have more energy for their work tasks. Secondly, you do not have to share a toilet with other employees. A lot of people are not comfortable sharing a toilet due to hygiene concerns, but working from home, they can enjoy the hygienic comforts of your own bathroom.
On the other hand, there are a couple of big drawbacks to home-based work. The first is that there are no managers to motivate workers and ensure that they complete their tasks on time. Employees may waste a lot of time watching YouTube videos or taking naps, as self-motivation can be difficult. The second problem is increased costs. Those working from home will have to spend more time heating or cooling their residence, use more electricity to power lights and a computer, and consume gas to cook or make coffee when preparing lunch.
To sum up, working at home can be good because it reduces travel to work and assures access to a personal restroom, but the absence of a boss and amenities costs are serious negative aspects.
There are two major advantages to earning your income from your own house. Firstly, you do not have to commute to work. This saves time and money, and allows you to avoid the stress of the morning rush hour. In the time saved on the commute, self-employed home workers can sleep in, which will ensure they have more energy for their work tasks. Secondly, you do not have to share a toilet with other employees. A lot of people are not comfortable sharing a toilet due to hygiene concerns, but working from home, they can enjoy the hygienic comforts of your own bathroom.
On the other hand, there are a couple of big drawbacks to home-based work. The first is that there are no managers to motivate workers and ensure that they complete their tasks on time. Employees may waste a lot of time watching YouTube videos or taking naps, as self-motivation can be difficult. The second problem is increased costs. Those working from home will have to spend more time heating or cooling their residence, use more electricity to power lights and a computer, and consume gas to cook or make coffee when preparing lunch.
To sum up, working at home can be good because it reduces travel to work and assures access to a personal restroom, but the absence of a boss and amenities costs are serious negative aspects.
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