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Consumer behavior has changed considerably in recent years due to technology. In waht ways does technology affect consumer activities such as shopping? Do the advantages outweigh the disadavantages?
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Evaluation
Task Response: 7
The essay responds well to the task, answering all parts of the question and providing a clear opinion.
Coherence & Cohesion: 6.5
The ideas are well organized and make sense. However, the essay sometimes lacks in appropriate transitions and cohesive devices.
Lexical Resource: 7
The vocabulary is varied and appropriate to the topic, with some impressive uses of higher-level expressions. But, there are also some noticeable spelling errors.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 6.5
The range of grammar is impressive, with both complex and simple sentences effectively used. However, there are several minor grammatical errors.
Overall: 6.75
The essay is satisfactory and meets the necessary requirements, but needs a bit more polish to reach a higher band score. Additionally, the consistent minor errors in spelling and grammar weigh down the score.
Task Response: 7
The essay responds well to the task, answering all parts of the question and providing a clear opinion.
Coherence & Cohesion: 6.5
The ideas are well organized and make sense. However, the essay sometimes lacks in appropriate transitions and cohesive devices.
Lexical Resource: 7
The vocabulary is varied and appropriate to the topic, with some impressive uses of higher-level expressions. But, there are also some noticeable spelling errors.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 6.5
The range of grammar is impressive, with both complex and simple sentences effectively used. However, there are several minor grammatical errors.
Overall: 6.75
The essay is satisfactory and meets the necessary requirements, but needs a bit more polish to reach a higher band score. Additionally, the consistent minor errors in spelling and grammar weigh down the score.
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Consumer behavior has changed considerably in recent years due to technology.
In waht ways does technology affect consumer activities such as shopping?
Do the advantages outweigh the disadavantages?
Essay:
It is undeniable that technological advancements have significantly influenced consumer behavior in recent decades. Traditionally, consumers would purchase products in person, but with the rise of smart devices, these behaviors have drastically evolved.
In recent years, the widespread distribution of smart devices has dramatically revolutionized consumer activity. Consumers no longer need to physically shop and can purchase necessities with just a few taps on a screen. The transition from analogue to digital has made shopping more convenient, prompting a shift in spending patterns. Moreover, researchers have found that consumers prefer online shopping for its convenience and the vast options available, leading to a paradigm shift in the retail market.
Online shopping has several notable advantages that surpass its disadvantages. Apart from convenience, it offers a wider variety of products and allows for price comparisons, enabling consumers to land the best deals swiftly. This shift to purchasing goods online has indeed made consumers' lives more comfortable and efficient.
In conclusion, technological development has introduced a new era in consumer behavior. The advantages of this shift to online purchasing far outweigh its drawbacks, offering consumers more choices and greater convenience.
Word count: 261
Essay translated in Korean:
기술의 발전이 소비자 행동에 뚜렷하게 영향을 미친 것은 부인할 수 없습니다. 전통적으로 소비자들은 직접 제품을 구입했지만, 스마트 장치의 등장으로 인해 이런 행동들은 크게 변화하게 되었습니다.
최근 수년간, 스마트 장치의 널리 퍼진 배포로 소비자 행동에 혁신적인 변화를 가져왔습니다. 소비자들은 더 이상 직접 쇼핑할 필요가 없고, 화면을 몇 번 탭하는 것만으로 필요품을 구입할 수 있습니다. 아날로그에서 디지털로의 변화로 쇼핑이 더 편리해져, 지출 패턴의 전환을 촉발하였습니다. 더욱이, 연구자들은 소비자들이 그 편리함과 넓은 선택지 덕분에 온라인 쇼핑을 선호한다는 것을 밝혀냈습니다.
온라인 쇼핑은 그 단점들을 뛰어넘는 여러 두드러진 이점을 가지고 있습니다. 편의성 뿐만 아니라, 제품의 더 큰 다양성을 제공하고, 가격 비교를 허용함으로써 소비자들이 가장 좋은 거래를 신속하게 이룰 수 있습니다. 이러한 온라인으로 상품을 구입하는 방향으로의 변화는 실제로 소비자들의 삶을 더욱 편안하고 효율적으로 만들어 주었습니다.
결론적으로, 기술 발전은 소비자 행동에 새로운 시대를 선사하였습니다. 온라인 구매로의 변화의 이점은 그 단점들보다 월등히 크며, 소비자들에게 더 많은 선택지와 큰 편리함을 제공합니다.
Good expressions:
1. paradigm shift in the retail market - 소매 시장의 패러다임 변화
2. land the best deals swiftly - 신속하게 최고의 거래를 이룰 수 있다
3. technological development has introduced a new era - 기술 발전이 새로운 시대를 선사하다
4. the advantages of this shift - 이 변화의 이점
5. offers consumers more choices and greater convenience - 소비자에게 더 많은 선택지와 큰 편리함을 제공하다
It is undeniable that technological advancements have significantly influenced consumer behavior in recent decades. Traditionally, consumers would purchase products in person, but with the rise of smart devices, these behaviors have drastically evolved.
In recent years, the widespread distribution of smart devices has dramatically revolutionized consumer activity. Consumers no longer need to physically shop and can purchase necessities with just a few taps on a screen. The transition from analogue to digital has made shopping more convenient, prompting a shift in spending patterns. Moreover, researchers have found that consumers prefer online shopping for its convenience and the vast options available, leading to a paradigm shift in the retail market.
Online shopping has several notable advantages that surpass its disadvantages. Apart from convenience, it offers a wider variety of products and allows for price comparisons, enabling consumers to land the best deals swiftly. This shift to purchasing goods online has indeed made consumers' lives more comfortable and efficient.
In conclusion, technological development has introduced a new era in consumer behavior. The advantages of this shift to online purchasing far outweigh its drawbacks, offering consumers more choices and greater convenience.
Word count: 261
Essay translated in Korean:
기술의 발전이 소비자 행동에 뚜렷하게 영향을 미친 것은 부인할 수 없습니다. 전통적으로 소비자들은 직접 제품을 구입했지만, 스마트 장치의 등장으로 인해 이런 행동들은 크게 변화하게 되었습니다.
최근 수년간, 스마트 장치의 널리 퍼진 배포로 소비자 행동에 혁신적인 변화를 가져왔습니다. 소비자들은 더 이상 직접 쇼핑할 필요가 없고, 화면을 몇 번 탭하는 것만으로 필요품을 구입할 수 있습니다. 아날로그에서 디지털로의 변화로 쇼핑이 더 편리해져, 지출 패턴의 전환을 촉발하였습니다. 더욱이, 연구자들은 소비자들이 그 편리함과 넓은 선택지 덕분에 온라인 쇼핑을 선호한다는 것을 밝혀냈습니다.
온라인 쇼핑은 그 단점들을 뛰어넘는 여러 두드러진 이점을 가지고 있습니다. 편의성 뿐만 아니라, 제품의 더 큰 다양성을 제공하고, 가격 비교를 허용함으로써 소비자들이 가장 좋은 거래를 신속하게 이룰 수 있습니다. 이러한 온라인으로 상품을 구입하는 방향으로의 변화는 실제로 소비자들의 삶을 더욱 편안하고 효율적으로 만들어 주었습니다.
결론적으로, 기술 발전은 소비자 행동에 새로운 시대를 선사하였습니다. 온라인 구매로의 변화의 이점은 그 단점들보다 월등히 크며, 소비자들에게 더 많은 선택지와 큰 편리함을 제공합니다.
Good expressions:
1. paradigm shift in the retail market - 소매 시장의 패러다임 변화
2. land the best deals swiftly - 신속하게 최고의 거래를 이룰 수 있다
3. technological development has introduced a new era - 기술 발전이 새로운 시대를 선사하다
4. the advantages of this shift - 이 변화의 이점
5. offers consumers more choices and greater convenience - 소비자에게 더 많은 선택지와 큰 편리함을 제공하다
제출한 라이팅
It is true that consumers' behaviors have significantly changed in the recent couple of years because of the technological development.
The main cause of spending patterns of consumers being shifted rapidly is that smart devices are swiftly distributed to people from all over the world in the last decade as science and technology continues to advance.
The distribution of electronic devices such as tablets and mobile phones has encouraged people to buy what they want and daily necessity without going shopping in person.
The transition from analog devices to digital gadgets and The advent of using mobile devices continually caused consumers to spend money just by moving their fingers.
According to the reports written by researchers who study the patterns of consumers stated people not only don't want to go out to purchase some things they hope for, but their behaviors has led the today's market to changing the existing ways to buy and sell products for different methods.
I strongly support the idea that the benefits of buying products online far outweighs the drawbacks.
It allows purchasers to have more diverse choices in the ways to buy items making their lives more conveniently.
On top of that, consumers can purchase products cheaper by comparing as many ones as possible, which means that they are able to make the best deal even faster through seeing more goods on the internet instead of visiting many shops.
A consumer's report covered by sellers has shown that people who used the internet with smart devices for shopping responded that they felt more comportable through accessing web sites which operate e-commerce than spending time checking out the many stores and stated the former method for buying products would be preferred because they can get some things they need more affordably.
The main cause of spending patterns of consumers being shifted rapidly is that smart devices are swiftly distributed to people from all over the world in the last decade as science and technology continues to advance.
The distribution of electronic devices such as tablets and mobile phones has encouraged people to buy what they want and daily necessity without going shopping in person.
The transition from analog devices to digital gadgets and The advent of using mobile devices continually caused consumers to spend money just by moving their fingers.
According to the reports written by researchers who study the patterns of consumers stated people not only don't want to go out to purchase some things they hope for, but their behaviors has led the today's market to changing the existing ways to buy and sell products for different methods.
I strongly support the idea that the benefits of buying products online far outweighs the drawbacks.
It allows purchasers to have more diverse choices in the ways to buy items making their lives more conveniently.
On top of that, consumers can purchase products cheaper by comparing as many ones as possible, which means that they are able to make the best deal even faster through seeing more goods on the internet instead of visiting many shops.
A consumer's report covered by sellers has shown that people who used the internet with smart devices for shopping responded that they felt more comportable through accessing web sites which operate e-commerce than spending time checking out the many stores and stated the former method for buying products would be preferred because they can get some things they need more affordably.
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