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- Discussion
In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smartphones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?
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Evaluation
Task Response: [8]
The student addressed all parts of the task adequately. The response clearly presents a fully developed position on the issue, with relevant, extended and supported ideas.
Coherence & Cohesion: [8]
Information and ideas are organized and presented coherently. The essay was well-structured with clear introduction, body paragraphs and conclusion. Transitions and pronominal references were used effectively to maintain the essay’s intellectual flow.
Lexical Resource: [7]
The student displayed a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision, and to accurately discuss the topic. However, usage of more sophisticated vocabulary would have earned a higher score.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: [7]
There is a mix of complex and simple sentences, as well as a variety of structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors that impede the understanding slightly.
Overall: [7.5]
The essay is well-written and makes valid points for both advantages and disadvantages of working from home. The candidate has displayed a good command of grammatical structures and vocabulary related to the subject matter. More complex structures and sophisticated vocabulary could increase the score.
Task Response: [8]
The student addressed all parts of the task adequately. The response clearly presents a fully developed position on the issue, with relevant, extended and supported ideas.
Coherence & Cohesion: [8]
Information and ideas are organized and presented coherently. The essay was well-structured with clear introduction, body paragraphs and conclusion. Transitions and pronominal references were used effectively to maintain the essay’s intellectual flow.
Lexical Resource: [7]
The student displayed a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision, and to accurately discuss the topic. However, usage of more sophisticated vocabulary would have earned a higher score.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: [7]
There is a mix of complex and simple sentences, as well as a variety of structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors that impede the understanding slightly.
Overall: [7.5]
The essay is well-written and makes valid points for both advantages and disadvantages of working from home. The candidate has displayed a good command of grammatical structures and vocabulary related to the subject matter. More complex structures and sophisticated vocabulary could increase the score.
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In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. With increased use of computers, the internet and smartphones, more and more people are starting to work from home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?
Essay:
The traditional practice of commuting to work is gradually being replaced by work-from-home arrangements, accelerated by advances in computer, internet, and smartphone technology. This new development has its pros and cons, which this essay aims to thoroughly discuss.
Working from home presents several benefits. Primarily, it eliminates the need for daily commuting, providing additional time that can be used more productively. Routine commuting is not only time-consuming but incurs costs such as fuel or ticket fares, which can be saved when working from home. Moreover, individuals have complete privacy, especially concerning personal facilities like toilets. In an era where hygiene is paramount, having your personal bathroom could add a level of comfort and safety.
However, the downside of remote working cannot be overlooked. Among them, the absence of immediate, hands-on supervision might decrease an employee's motivation and productivity. The urge to relax or waste time on distractions like social media might overtake the drive to complete work tasks. Furthermore, working from home might inflate household expenses such as heating or cooling, electricity, and gas for cooking, which could offset the money saved from commuting.
In conclusion, while work-from-home arrangements provide flexibility and privacy, they could pose challenges in employee motivation and increase household expenses.
Word count: 240
Essay translated in Korean:
주로 출퇴근으로 일을 하는 전통적인 방식은 컴퓨터, 인터넷, 스마트폰 기술의 발전으로 점차 집에서 일하는 방식으로 대체되고 있습니다. 이 새로운 발전에는 장단점이 있는데, 이 논문에서는 이를 철저히 논의할 예정입니다.
집에서 일하는 것은 여러 가지 이점이 있습니다. 가장 중요한 것은 매일 출퇴근의 필요성을 없애면서 추가적인 시간을 더 생산적으로 사용할 수 있게 해줍니다. 출퇴근은 시간을 많이 소비하며, 기름 또는 티켓 요금 등의 비용이 들어가는데, 집에서 일하면 이러한 비용을 절약할 수 있습니다. 또한, 화장실 같은 개인 시설에 대한 완전한 사생활이 보장됩니다. 위생이 중요한 시대에 자신만의 화장실을 갖는 것은 편안함과 안전성을 더할 수 있습니다.
Good expressions:
1. "In an era where hygiene is paramount" - 위생이 가장 중요한 시대에서
2. "The urge to relax or waste time" - 휴식이나 시간 낭비에 대한 충동
3. "inflate household expenses" - 가정의 비용을 불어냄
4. "offset the money saved from commuting" - 출퇴근으로 절약한 돈을 상쇄하다.
The traditional practice of commuting to work is gradually being replaced by work-from-home arrangements, accelerated by advances in computer, internet, and smartphone technology. This new development has its pros and cons, which this essay aims to thoroughly discuss.
Working from home presents several benefits. Primarily, it eliminates the need for daily commuting, providing additional time that can be used more productively. Routine commuting is not only time-consuming but incurs costs such as fuel or ticket fares, which can be saved when working from home. Moreover, individuals have complete privacy, especially concerning personal facilities like toilets. In an era where hygiene is paramount, having your personal bathroom could add a level of comfort and safety.
However, the downside of remote working cannot be overlooked. Among them, the absence of immediate, hands-on supervision might decrease an employee's motivation and productivity. The urge to relax or waste time on distractions like social media might overtake the drive to complete work tasks. Furthermore, working from home might inflate household expenses such as heating or cooling, electricity, and gas for cooking, which could offset the money saved from commuting.
In conclusion, while work-from-home arrangements provide flexibility and privacy, they could pose challenges in employee motivation and increase household expenses.
Word count: 240
Essay translated in Korean:
주로 출퇴근으로 일을 하는 전통적인 방식은 컴퓨터, 인터넷, 스마트폰 기술의 발전으로 점차 집에서 일하는 방식으로 대체되고 있습니다. 이 새로운 발전에는 장단점이 있는데, 이 논문에서는 이를 철저히 논의할 예정입니다.
집에서 일하는 것은 여러 가지 이점이 있습니다. 가장 중요한 것은 매일 출퇴근의 필요성을 없애면서 추가적인 시간을 더 생산적으로 사용할 수 있게 해줍니다. 출퇴근은 시간을 많이 소비하며, 기름 또는 티켓 요금 등의 비용이 들어가는데, 집에서 일하면 이러한 비용을 절약할 수 있습니다. 또한, 화장실 같은 개인 시설에 대한 완전한 사생활이 보장됩니다. 위생이 중요한 시대에 자신만의 화장실을 갖는 것은 편안함과 안전성을 더할 수 있습니다.
Good expressions:
1. "In an era where hygiene is paramount" - 위생이 가장 중요한 시대에서
2. "The urge to relax or waste time" - 휴식이나 시간 낭비에 대한 충동
3. "inflate household expenses" - 가정의 비용을 불어냄
4. "offset the money saved from commuting" - 출퇴근으로 절약한 돈을 상쇄하다.
제출한 라이팅
Prior to recent times, workers commuted to the location of their job, but due to the growing usage of computers, the internet and smartphones, a growing number of persons have begun to earn a living from their residence. There are some advantages to working from home, but a number of disadvantages also. In this essay I will look at both the pros and cons of working where you reside.
There are two major advantages to earning your income from your own house. Firstly, you do not have to commute to work. This saves time and money, and allows you to avoid the stress of the morning rush hour. In the time saved on the commute, selfemployed home workers can sleep in, which will ensure they have more energy for their work tasks. Secondly, you do not have to share a toilet with other employees. A lot of people are not comfortable sharing a toilet due to hygiene concerns, but working from home, they can enjoy the hygienic comforts of your own bathroom.
On the other hand, there are a couple of big drawbacks to home-based work. The first is that there are no managers to motivate workers and ensure that they complete their tasks on time. Employees may waste a lot of time watching YouTube videos or taking naps, as self-motivation can be difficult. The second problem is increased costs. Those working from home will have to spend more time heating or cooling their residence, use more electricity to power lights and a computer, and consume gas to cook or make coffee when preparing lunch.
To sum up, working at home can be good because it reduces travel to work and assures access to a personal restroom, but the absence of a boss and amenities costs are serious negative aspects.
There are two major advantages to earning your income from your own house. Firstly, you do not have to commute to work. This saves time and money, and allows you to avoid the stress of the morning rush hour. In the time saved on the commute, selfemployed home workers can sleep in, which will ensure they have more energy for their work tasks. Secondly, you do not have to share a toilet with other employees. A lot of people are not comfortable sharing a toilet due to hygiene concerns, but working from home, they can enjoy the hygienic comforts of your own bathroom.
On the other hand, there are a couple of big drawbacks to home-based work. The first is that there are no managers to motivate workers and ensure that they complete their tasks on time. Employees may waste a lot of time watching YouTube videos or taking naps, as self-motivation can be difficult. The second problem is increased costs. Those working from home will have to spend more time heating or cooling their residence, use more electricity to power lights and a computer, and consume gas to cook or make coffee when preparing lunch.
To sum up, working at home can be good because it reduces travel to work and assures access to a personal restroom, but the absence of a boss and amenities costs are serious negative aspects.
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