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Should young people follow older people's advice or is it good for them to challenge older people's opinions and thoughts. Discuss both views abd give your own opinion.
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Should young people follow older people's advice or is it good for them to challenge older people's opinions and thoughts. Discuss both views abd give your own opinion.
Essay:
People's attitudes towards the interaction between younger and older generations have always been divided, with some arguing that youth should respect the counsel of their elders while others view it as beneficial for them to question conventional wisdom. Both perspectives have their respective merits but, in my opinion, the best course of action lies somewhere in between.
On one hand, there is a strong case for young people to respect and listen to the advice of older individuals. Elders possess a wealth of life experiences and potentially profound wisdom that has been cultivated over many years. Their insights and guidance can therefore offer invaluable lessons and help the youth avoid unnecessary pitfalls on their journey to adulthood.
On the other hand, the dynamism of youth should not be underestimated. They should be encouraged to critically question and challenge established ideas if progress is to be made. The advancement of society often lies in the ability to innovate, rethink, and remodel. Young people's ability to see things from a fresh perspective often leads to revolutionary ideas that propel society forward.
In conclusion, while the advice from older people should be valued for its wisdom and experience, it's equally important for the youth to question and challenge the status quo. Treading the balance between respectful regard and healthy skepticism could pave the way for a more harmonious society that both honors the past and embraces the future.
Word count: 248
Essay translated in Korean:
사람들의 젊은 세대와 노년 세대의 상호작용에 대한 태도는 항상 분분했으며 일부는 청년들이 그들의 어르신들의 조언을 존중해야 한다고 주장하고 다른 사람들은 그것이 전통적인 지혜에 도전하는 것이 이익이라고 생각한다. Both perspectives have their respective merits but, in my opinion, the best course of action lies somewhere in between. 양쪽 모두에게 그들 각자의 장점이 있지만, 제 생각에는 가장 좋은 방향이 어딘가에 있습니다.
Good expressions:
1. Cultivated over many years - 많은 연도 동안 점진적으로 개발한
2. Unnecessary pitfalls - 불필요한 함정들
3. Dynamism of youth - 청년의 역동성
4. Revolutionary ideas - 혁명적인 아이디어들
5. Treading the balance - 균형을 잡고 나아가는 것
6. Healthy skepticism - 건전한 회의론
7. Both honors the past and embraces the future - 과거를 존중하고 미래를 포용하다
People's attitudes towards the interaction between younger and older generations have always been divided, with some arguing that youth should respect the counsel of their elders while others view it as beneficial for them to question conventional wisdom. Both perspectives have their respective merits but, in my opinion, the best course of action lies somewhere in between.
On one hand, there is a strong case for young people to respect and listen to the advice of older individuals. Elders possess a wealth of life experiences and potentially profound wisdom that has been cultivated over many years. Their insights and guidance can therefore offer invaluable lessons and help the youth avoid unnecessary pitfalls on their journey to adulthood.
On the other hand, the dynamism of youth should not be underestimated. They should be encouraged to critically question and challenge established ideas if progress is to be made. The advancement of society often lies in the ability to innovate, rethink, and remodel. Young people's ability to see things from a fresh perspective often leads to revolutionary ideas that propel society forward.
In conclusion, while the advice from older people should be valued for its wisdom and experience, it's equally important for the youth to question and challenge the status quo. Treading the balance between respectful regard and healthy skepticism could pave the way for a more harmonious society that both honors the past and embraces the future.
Word count: 248
Essay translated in Korean:
사람들의 젊은 세대와 노년 세대의 상호작용에 대한 태도는 항상 분분했으며 일부는 청년들이 그들의 어르신들의 조언을 존중해야 한다고 주장하고 다른 사람들은 그것이 전통적인 지혜에 도전하는 것이 이익이라고 생각한다. Both perspectives have their respective merits but, in my opinion, the best course of action lies somewhere in between. 양쪽 모두에게 그들 각자의 장점이 있지만, 제 생각에는 가장 좋은 방향이 어딘가에 있습니다.
Good expressions:
1. Cultivated over many years - 많은 연도 동안 점진적으로 개발한
2. Unnecessary pitfalls - 불필요한 함정들
3. Dynamism of youth - 청년의 역동성
4. Revolutionary ideas - 혁명적인 아이디어들
5. Treading the balance - 균형을 잡고 나아가는 것
6. Healthy skepticism - 건전한 회의론
7. Both honors the past and embraces the future - 과거를 존중하고 미래를 포용하다
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