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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?
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Evaluation
Task Response: 7.5
The student completely satisfies all parts of the task. They presented clear arguments in favor of both viewpoints before choosing a side. However, deeper or stronger justifications could have been made for the chosen side.
Coherence & Cohesion: 8
The student’s ideas are logically organised and presented coherently. There is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to conclusion. Good use of linking words and cohesive devices. However, there were few instances of repeated ideas.
Lexical Resource: 7.5
The student uses a wide vocabulary to express their ideas with little repetition, however, there were a few inappropriately chosen words. The student also uses paraphrasing effectively, which is crucial in IELTS essays.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 7.5
The student uses a variety of complex sentence structures and uses them accurately. However, some errors were observed, such as 'heated dabate' instead of 'heated debate', 'vaild' instead of 'valid', 'autonomus' instead of 'autonomous', and 'participa/ringing' instead of 'participating'. The student is also able to use conditionals and passive voice correctly.
Overall: 7.5
Task Response: 7.5
The student completely satisfies all parts of the task. They presented clear arguments in favor of both viewpoints before choosing a side. However, deeper or stronger justifications could have been made for the chosen side.
Coherence & Cohesion: 8
The student’s ideas are logically organised and presented coherently. There is a clear progression of ideas from the introduction to conclusion. Good use of linking words and cohesive devices. However, there were few instances of repeated ideas.
Lexical Resource: 7.5
The student uses a wide vocabulary to express their ideas with little repetition, however, there were a few inappropriately chosen words. The student also uses paraphrasing effectively, which is crucial in IELTS essays.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 7.5
The student uses a variety of complex sentence structures and uses them accurately. However, some errors were observed, such as 'heated dabate' instead of 'heated debate', 'vaild' instead of 'valid', 'autonomus' instead of 'autonomous', and 'participa/ringing' instead of 'participating'. The student is also able to use conditionals and passive voice correctly.
Overall: 7.5
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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?
Essay:
The debate over whether large or small companies make for a better employment experience remains ongoing. Some prefer the intimacy and diversified tasks of a smaller company, whereas others are proponents of the structure and support provided by large corporations.
Small firms proponents argue that they offer broader responsibilities, allowing employees the opportunity to enrich their career experiences and develop a well-rounded skillset. They contend that within smaller organisations, there is a more relaxed and familial environment fostering personal growth and autonomy.
In contrast, advocates of larger corporations point out the increased job stability and financial benefits. They offer benefits including paid leaves and insurance which contribute towards a healthy work-life balance. Additionally, they are more likely to present opportunities for progression and taking part in complex projects, leading to professional development.
In conclusion, while smaller companies are lauded for their diverse opportunities and close-knit work culture, I am of the assertion that the benefits and developmental opportunities in large corporations outweigh their counterparts.
Word count: 171
Essay translated in Korean:
대기업과 소기업 중 어디서 일하는 것이 더 좋은 건지에 대한 논란은 계속되고 있다. 어떤 사람들은 더 친밀하고 다양한 업무를 제공하는 소기업을 선호하는 반면, 다른 사람들은 대기업이 제공하는 체계적인 지원을 주장한다.
소기업 지지자들은 그들이 더 넓은 책임을 제공하고, 직원들에게 경력 경험을 풍부하게 하고 다재다능한 기술 세트를 개발할 기회를 제공한다고 주장한다. 그들은 소규모 조직 내에서 더 편안하고 가족 같은 환경이 개인의 성장과 자율성을 촉진한다고 주장한다.
반면에, 대기업 지지자들은 고용 안정성과 재정적 혜택이 더 많다고 지적한다. 그들은 유급 휴가와 보험 같은 혜택을 제공하는데, 이는 건강한 직장생활과의 균형에 기여한다. 또한, 그들은 진급 기회와 복잡한 프로젝트에 참여할 가능성이 더 많으므로, 전문적인 발전을 이끈다.
결론적으로, 소기업은 다양한 기회와 밀접한 업무 문화를 위해 칭찬받고 있지만, 대기업의 혜택과 발전 기회는 그들의 목표를 능가하는 것으로 나는 주장한다.
Word count: 184
Good expressions:
1. The debate over whether - 어디서 일하는 것이 더 좋은지에 대한 논란
2. Well-rounded skillset - 다재다능한 기술 세트
3. Familial environment fostering personal growth - 가족 같은 환경이 개인의 성장을 촉진
4. Increased job stability and financial benefits - 고용 안정성과 재정적 혜택
5. Opportunities for progression and taking part in complex projects - 진급 기회와 복잡한 프로젝트에 참여할 가능성
6. Outweigh their counterparts - 그들의 목표를 능가
The debate over whether large or small companies make for a better employment experience remains ongoing. Some prefer the intimacy and diversified tasks of a smaller company, whereas others are proponents of the structure and support provided by large corporations.
Small firms proponents argue that they offer broader responsibilities, allowing employees the opportunity to enrich their career experiences and develop a well-rounded skillset. They contend that within smaller organisations, there is a more relaxed and familial environment fostering personal growth and autonomy.
In contrast, advocates of larger corporations point out the increased job stability and financial benefits. They offer benefits including paid leaves and insurance which contribute towards a healthy work-life balance. Additionally, they are more likely to present opportunities for progression and taking part in complex projects, leading to professional development.
In conclusion, while smaller companies are lauded for their diverse opportunities and close-knit work culture, I am of the assertion that the benefits and developmental opportunities in large corporations outweigh their counterparts.
Word count: 171
Essay translated in Korean:
대기업과 소기업 중 어디서 일하는 것이 더 좋은 건지에 대한 논란은 계속되고 있다. 어떤 사람들은 더 친밀하고 다양한 업무를 제공하는 소기업을 선호하는 반면, 다른 사람들은 대기업이 제공하는 체계적인 지원을 주장한다.
소기업 지지자들은 그들이 더 넓은 책임을 제공하고, 직원들에게 경력 경험을 풍부하게 하고 다재다능한 기술 세트를 개발할 기회를 제공한다고 주장한다. 그들은 소규모 조직 내에서 더 편안하고 가족 같은 환경이 개인의 성장과 자율성을 촉진한다고 주장한다.
반면에, 대기업 지지자들은 고용 안정성과 재정적 혜택이 더 많다고 지적한다. 그들은 유급 휴가와 보험 같은 혜택을 제공하는데, 이는 건강한 직장생활과의 균형에 기여한다. 또한, 그들은 진급 기회와 복잡한 프로젝트에 참여할 가능성이 더 많으므로, 전문적인 발전을 이끈다.
결론적으로, 소기업은 다양한 기회와 밀접한 업무 문화를 위해 칭찬받고 있지만, 대기업의 혜택과 발전 기회는 그들의 목표를 능가하는 것으로 나는 주장한다.
Word count: 184
Good expressions:
1. The debate over whether - 어디서 일하는 것이 더 좋은지에 대한 논란
2. Well-rounded skillset - 다재다능한 기술 세트
3. Familial environment fostering personal growth - 가족 같은 환경이 개인의 성장을 촉진
4. Increased job stability and financial benefits - 고용 안정성과 재정적 혜택
5. Opportunities for progression and taking part in complex projects - 진급 기회와 복잡한 프로젝트에 참여할 가능성
6. Outweigh their counterparts - 그들의 목표를 능가
제출한 라이팅
There is a heated dabate that if large companies provide a better environment for workers or not. While some individuals argue that smaller companies are more beneficial, I firmly contend that large ones are more supportive and helpful for employees in various ways.
Advocates of working in a small company have several vaild reasons. Firstly, workers can take various responsibilities at the same time, in the smaller company, participainting in the account task, selling, and customer services. This circumstance could foster individual’s abilities related to their jobs in general, encouraging workers to learn new skills or obtain the latest knowledge. Furthermore, small corporations tend to emphasize closer relationships between co-workers and employers, by creating more comfortable and flexible atmosphere. With such traits, employees would have a sense of ownership, making them be more autonomus and independent.
Despite such merits of working in a small company, I assert that large companies can increase the job satisfaction of their workers with several aspects. The most crucial factor is that individuals working in a big company receive a few benefits such as paid leaves and sick days, extra finance supports, and sufficient resource during working. These supports undoubtedely impact the balance between work and personal life, leading to individuals’ well-being. Moreover, large corporations can impart new opportunities or introduce challenges such as promotions, participations in difficult projects. Through these experiences, employees improve their efficiency and productivity, bringing individuals’ growth and development in their fields.
To conclude, even though some people believe smaller companies are a better work environment, I strongly claim that large corporations can provide more attractive benefits for their workers, promoting overall job satisfaction.
Advocates of working in a small company have several vaild reasons. Firstly, workers can take various responsibilities at the same time, in the smaller company, participainting in the account task, selling, and customer services. This circumstance could foster individual’s abilities related to their jobs in general, encouraging workers to learn new skills or obtain the latest knowledge. Furthermore, small corporations tend to emphasize closer relationships between co-workers and employers, by creating more comfortable and flexible atmosphere. With such traits, employees would have a sense of ownership, making them be more autonomus and independent.
Despite such merits of working in a small company, I assert that large companies can increase the job satisfaction of their workers with several aspects. The most crucial factor is that individuals working in a big company receive a few benefits such as paid leaves and sick days, extra finance supports, and sufficient resource during working. These supports undoubtedely impact the balance between work and personal life, leading to individuals’ well-being. Moreover, large corporations can impart new opportunities or introduce challenges such as promotions, participations in difficult projects. Through these experiences, employees improve their efficiency and productivity, bringing individuals’ growth and development in their fields.
To conclude, even though some people believe smaller companies are a better work environment, I strongly claim that large corporations can provide more attractive benefits for their workers, promoting overall job satisfaction.
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