AI IELTS Writing AI Correction
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Air transport is increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to other countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
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Evaluation
Task Response: 6
The essay attempts to address both sides of the argument, outlining the advantages and disadvantages of using air freight for transporting perishable goods. However, the points made are somewhat unclear, and it requires more elaboration and clearer illustration of the points. Also, the conclusion has a repetition of the points.
Coherence & Cohesion: 6
There is a tangible structure to the essay with introductions, arguments and conclusions. However, there are instances where the flow of thought gets confusing and disjointed. Transition words are rarely used, which interrupts the flow of the argument. Some sentences and phrases are redundant and repetitive, which hinder the clarity of the argument.
Lexical Resource: 7.5
The essay uses a varied range of vocabulary, with several complex words included. There are some instances of issues in word choice and some words are not used appropriately or effectively. There were versatile uses of vocabulary related to the topic task.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 6
The essay demonstrates a range of complex grammatical structures. However, there are multiple instances where sentences are awkwardly constructed and lack clarity. Moreover, a few grammatical errors and misuse of punctuation also impact the essay's readability.
Overall: 6.5
The essay has decent components and showcases an adequate level of understanding in terms of lexical resource, and task response. Improvement in coherence, cohesion and grammatical accuracy would enhance the quality of the essay and lead to a higher band score.
Task Response: 6
The essay attempts to address both sides of the argument, outlining the advantages and disadvantages of using air freight for transporting perishable goods. However, the points made are somewhat unclear, and it requires more elaboration and clearer illustration of the points. Also, the conclusion has a repetition of the points.
Coherence & Cohesion: 6
There is a tangible structure to the essay with introductions, arguments and conclusions. However, there are instances where the flow of thought gets confusing and disjointed. Transition words are rarely used, which interrupts the flow of the argument. Some sentences and phrases are redundant and repetitive, which hinder the clarity of the argument.
Lexical Resource: 7.5
The essay uses a varied range of vocabulary, with several complex words included. There are some instances of issues in word choice and some words are not used appropriately or effectively. There were versatile uses of vocabulary related to the topic task.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 6
The essay demonstrates a range of complex grammatical structures. However, there are multiple instances where sentences are awkwardly constructed and lack clarity. Moreover, a few grammatical errors and misuse of punctuation also impact the essay's readability.
Overall: 6.5
The essay has decent components and showcases an adequate level of understanding in terms of lexical resource, and task response. Improvement in coherence, cohesion and grammatical accuracy would enhance the quality of the essay and lead to a higher band score.
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Air transport is increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to other countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?
Essay:
As the global demand for fresh produce rises, we are seeing an increase in the use of air transport for the distribution of fruits and vegetables to regions where they are non-seasonal or non-native. This piece will explore the benefits and downsides in employing air freight for such purposes from both a logistical and economic standpoint.
Air transport has the distinct advantage of speed, a key factor when dealing with fresh produce. For instance, shipping produce by sea might take weeks, during which a variety of unpredictable problems such as spoilage due to extended exposure or unforeseen delivery delays may arise. In contrast, air transport allows for expedited delivery, ensuring freshness and minimizing the risk of spoilage. This speed also allows companies to respond quickly to fluctuating market demands, potentially securing a greater market share.
However, the use of air freight for perishable goods comes with its own set of challenges. Significantly, it is the most costly mode of transport, primarily due to high fuel costs and the comparatively lower cargo capacity of airplanes. This inevitably triggers an increase in the retail price of these imported items, potentially leading to inflation. Firms are left with little choice but to pass these costs onto consumers.
In conclusion, the use of air transport for the distribution of fruits and vegetables offers many benefits such as speed and adaptability but also carries significant economic implications including potentially triggering inflation.
Word count: 263
Essay translated in Korean:
신선한 농산물에 대한 전세계적인 수요가 증가함에 따라, 그것들이 비 계절적이거나 원산지가 아닌 지역으로 과일과 야채를 배송하기 위해 항공 운송의 사용이 증가하고 있다. 이 글은 이러한 목적으로 항공 화물을 사용하는 것의 장점과 단점을 물류 및 경제적 관점에서 살펴볼 것이다.
항공 운송은 속도라는 명확한 장점을 가지고 있으며, 이는 신선한 농산물을 다루는 데 중요한 요소이다. 예를 들어, 해상으로 농산물을 운송하는 데는 수주일이 걸릴 수 있으며, 이 기간 동안 노출로 인한 부패 또는 예측하지 못한 배송 지연과 같은 다양한 예측 불가능한 문제가 발생할 수 있다. 반면에 항공 운송은 신속한 배송을 가능하게 하여 신선도를 보장하고 부패 위험을 최소화한다. 이 속도는 기업이 변동하는 시장 수요에 빠르게 대응할 수 있게 해주며, 이는 잠재적으로 더 큰 시장 점유율을 확보하게 된다.
그러나, 취약한 상품에 대한 항공화물 사용은 그 자체의 도전과제를 가지고 있다. 주요하게는 화물 운송의 가장 비싼 방식이며, 이는 주로 고유가와 비교해 항공기의 화물 운송 용량이 상대적으로 적기 때문이다. 이는 필연적으로 이러한 수입품의 소매 가격을 증가시키며, 이는 잠재적으로 인플레이션을 초래한다. 이러한 비용을 소비자에게 전가할 수 밖에 없는 기업이 남는다.
결론적으로, 과일과 야채를 배포하기 위한 항공 운송의 사용은 속도와 적응성의 많은 이점을 제공하지만, 잠재적으로 인플레이션을 초래하는 등의 중요한 경제적 영향을 미친다.
Good expressions:
1. Unpredictable problems - 예측 불가능한 문제
2. Expedited delivery - 신속한 배송
3. Fluctuating market demands - 변동하는 시장 수요
4. Significantly costly - 상당히 비싸다
5. Economic implications - 경제적 영향
6. Potentially triggering inflation - 잠재적으로 인플레이션을 일으킬 수 있다
As the global demand for fresh produce rises, we are seeing an increase in the use of air transport for the distribution of fruits and vegetables to regions where they are non-seasonal or non-native. This piece will explore the benefits and downsides in employing air freight for such purposes from both a logistical and economic standpoint.
Air transport has the distinct advantage of speed, a key factor when dealing with fresh produce. For instance, shipping produce by sea might take weeks, during which a variety of unpredictable problems such as spoilage due to extended exposure or unforeseen delivery delays may arise. In contrast, air transport allows for expedited delivery, ensuring freshness and minimizing the risk of spoilage. This speed also allows companies to respond quickly to fluctuating market demands, potentially securing a greater market share.
However, the use of air freight for perishable goods comes with its own set of challenges. Significantly, it is the most costly mode of transport, primarily due to high fuel costs and the comparatively lower cargo capacity of airplanes. This inevitably triggers an increase in the retail price of these imported items, potentially leading to inflation. Firms are left with little choice but to pass these costs onto consumers.
In conclusion, the use of air transport for the distribution of fruits and vegetables offers many benefits such as speed and adaptability but also carries significant economic implications including potentially triggering inflation.
Word count: 263
Essay translated in Korean:
신선한 농산물에 대한 전세계적인 수요가 증가함에 따라, 그것들이 비 계절적이거나 원산지가 아닌 지역으로 과일과 야채를 배송하기 위해 항공 운송의 사용이 증가하고 있다. 이 글은 이러한 목적으로 항공 화물을 사용하는 것의 장점과 단점을 물류 및 경제적 관점에서 살펴볼 것이다.
항공 운송은 속도라는 명확한 장점을 가지고 있으며, 이는 신선한 농산물을 다루는 데 중요한 요소이다. 예를 들어, 해상으로 농산물을 운송하는 데는 수주일이 걸릴 수 있으며, 이 기간 동안 노출로 인한 부패 또는 예측하지 못한 배송 지연과 같은 다양한 예측 불가능한 문제가 발생할 수 있다. 반면에 항공 운송은 신속한 배송을 가능하게 하여 신선도를 보장하고 부패 위험을 최소화한다. 이 속도는 기업이 변동하는 시장 수요에 빠르게 대응할 수 있게 해주며, 이는 잠재적으로 더 큰 시장 점유율을 확보하게 된다.
그러나, 취약한 상품에 대한 항공화물 사용은 그 자체의 도전과제를 가지고 있다. 주요하게는 화물 운송의 가장 비싼 방식이며, 이는 주로 고유가와 비교해 항공기의 화물 운송 용량이 상대적으로 적기 때문이다. 이는 필연적으로 이러한 수입품의 소매 가격을 증가시키며, 이는 잠재적으로 인플레이션을 초래한다. 이러한 비용을 소비자에게 전가할 수 밖에 없는 기업이 남는다.
결론적으로, 과일과 야채를 배포하기 위한 항공 운송의 사용은 속도와 적응성의 많은 이점을 제공하지만, 잠재적으로 인플레이션을 초래하는 등의 중요한 경제적 영향을 미친다.
Good expressions:
1. Unpredictable problems - 예측 불가능한 문제
2. Expedited delivery - 신속한 배송
3. Fluctuating market demands - 변동하는 시장 수요
4. Significantly costly - 상당히 비싸다
5. Economic implications - 경제적 영향
6. Potentially triggering inflation - 잠재적으로 인플레이션을 일으킬 수 있다
제출한 라이팅
It is a widely known fact that many food resources are imported and exported by air transport to a variety of countries which can be put on these items as quickly. This activity has a clear advantage and disadvantages in air logistics systems have significant delivery prices. This essay will illustrate what can lead to merits and demerits in trading from an international logistic and economic perspective.
One of the primary advantages of trading by air transport has a very specific advantage compared with other trading methods in fast and adapting to a dynamic food market condition. Firstly, it illustrated the quicker delivery speed of air-plant logistics than others. For example, if companies import tomatoes by ship, they might wait for a long time and not know the date when their goods unload since merchant ships are slower than other modes of transport. In the process, a number of risks may occur such as decomposing and non-systematic risks because of too long a logistic time which can cause non-systematic risks and costs such as spoilage and delays due to prolonged logistics times. On the other hand, not only delivering by aeroplanes enables significantly faster delivery of goods to the right locations, which can biggest support dominating the proportion of market share since the firm can be the first to provide new goods to customers. As a result, this strategy improves cooperation income by allowing cooperation to preoccupy in market.
Although transport for air-fort includes many merit ways for food-resources trading, the method impacts inflation in the markets. Firstly, using air freight cost is the most expensive than other trading ways such as ship and train because the airport requires too much fuel to transport the weight of the food. Because planes have lower cargo capacity compared to other modes of transport. At this point, firms have no choice to increase costs but to make one choice. Therefore, moving items by air transport is expensive, which may lead to high inflation because of air transport logistic system costs.
To conclude, air transport logistic systems have a dynamic advantage in the fast delivery of products and preventing non-systematic risks. But the air transport logistic process is the most expensive than others which may lead to high inflation.
One of the primary advantages of trading by air transport has a very specific advantage compared with other trading methods in fast and adapting to a dynamic food market condition. Firstly, it illustrated the quicker delivery speed of air-plant logistics than others. For example, if companies import tomatoes by ship, they might wait for a long time and not know the date when their goods unload since merchant ships are slower than other modes of transport. In the process, a number of risks may occur such as decomposing and non-systematic risks because of too long a logistic time which can cause non-systematic risks and costs such as spoilage and delays due to prolonged logistics times. On the other hand, not only delivering by aeroplanes enables significantly faster delivery of goods to the right locations, which can biggest support dominating the proportion of market share since the firm can be the first to provide new goods to customers. As a result, this strategy improves cooperation income by allowing cooperation to preoccupy in market.
Although transport for air-fort includes many merit ways for food-resources trading, the method impacts inflation in the markets. Firstly, using air freight cost is the most expensive than other trading ways such as ship and train because the airport requires too much fuel to transport the weight of the food. Because planes have lower cargo capacity compared to other modes of transport. At this point, firms have no choice to increase costs but to make one choice. Therefore, moving items by air transport is expensive, which may lead to high inflation because of air transport logistic system costs.
To conclude, air transport logistic systems have a dynamic advantage in the fast delivery of products and preventing non-systematic risks. But the air transport logistic process is the most expensive than others which may lead to high inflation.
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