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The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Evaluation
Task Response: 8.5
The student addresses all parts of the task appropriately, provides an overview of most main trends. The data is clearly described, and there are relevant comparisons made.
Coherence & Cohesion: 8.5
The essay is logically organised, uses paragraphing appropriately, and is cohesive and coherent. The relationship between sentences and ideas are clarified transparently.
Lexical Resource: 8
The student uses a good range of vocabulary, which is appropriate and accurate. There are some skilful paraphrases like 'construction of automobile' for 'manufacture of passenger cars', however, the essay could benefit from even more diverse usage.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 9
Excellent control of grammar and punctuation. Clear, accurate complex sentences effectively used and few minor errors do not impede communication.
Overall: 8.5
Task Response: 8.5
The student addresses all parts of the task appropriately, provides an overview of most main trends. The data is clearly described, and there are relevant comparisons made.
Coherence & Cohesion: 8.5
The essay is logically organised, uses paragraphing appropriately, and is cohesive and coherent. The relationship between sentences and ideas are clarified transparently.
Lexical Resource: 8
The student uses a good range of vocabulary, which is appropriate and accurate. There are some skilful paraphrases like 'construction of automobile' for 'manufacture of passenger cars', however, the essay could benefit from even more diverse usage.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 9
Excellent control of grammar and punctuation. Clear, accurate complex sentences effectively used and few minor errors do not impede communication.
Overall: 8.5
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The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Essay:
The given pie chart provides data concerning the production of passenger automobiles in different regions of the world in the year 2015. It clearly indicates the dominance of three regions namely China, Europe and North America in global car manufacturing landscape.
The major contributing nations to the global car manufacturing industry are China and Europe, each manufacturing nearly a quarter of the total output, thereby making them the most prominent players in this sphere. On the other hand, North America, inclusive of the USA and Canada, stands third and has manufactured one-fifth of the global car output in 2015. Japan and Korea together contributed to 16 percent of the worldwide production, still making them noteworthy players in the car manufacturing industry.
South Asia follows with 8% of global production, which is double the quantity produced by South America that produced only 4% of total passenger cars. The smallest contribution to the global car manufacturing comes from the Middle East and Africa, with a negligible share of 2% only.
In conclusion, data shows the prominence of China, Europe and North America in the car manufacturing industry while other regions significantly lag behind in 2015.
Word count: 191 words
Essay translated in Korean:
주어진 파이 차트는 2015년에 세계 각 지역에서 승용차를 얼마나 생산했는지에 대한 데이터를 제공합니다. 이는 중국, 유럽, 북미 세 지역이 글로벌 자동차 제조 분야에서의 지배력을 분명하게 나타냅니다.
글로벌 자동차 제조 산업에 가장 크게 기여한 국가들은 중국과 유럽으로, 각각 총 생산량의 약 4분의 1을 생산하여 이 분야에서 가장 두드러진 역할을 하고 있습니다. 반면에, 미국과 캐나다를 포함한 북미는 세 번째로 많이 생산하였으며, 2015년에 글로벌 차량 생산의 5분의 1을 차지했습니다. 일본과 한국은 함께 세계 생산량의 16%를 차지하여 여전히 자동차 제조 산업에서 주목할만한 역할을 하고 있습니다.
남아시아는 글로벌 생산량의 8%로 추적하며, 이는 남아메리카에서 생산된 승용차의 양의 두 배입니다. 가장 작은 기여를 한 지역은 중동과 아프리카로, 전체의 2%만 차지하였습니다.
결론적으로, 이 데이터는 2015년에 중국, 유럽, 북미가 자동차 제조 산업에서 두드러진 위치에 있는 반면 다른 지역들은 크게 뒤처져 있음을 보여줍니다.
Good expressions:
1. dominance in global car manufacturing landscape - 글로벌 자동차 제조분야에서의 지배력
2. the most prominent players in this sphere - 이 분야에서 가장 두드러진 역할을 하는 사람들
3. making them noteworthy players - 그들을 주목할만한 플레이어로 만듭니다.
4. significantly lag behind - 크게 뒤처져 있다.
The given pie chart provides data concerning the production of passenger automobiles in different regions of the world in the year 2015. It clearly indicates the dominance of three regions namely China, Europe and North America in global car manufacturing landscape.
The major contributing nations to the global car manufacturing industry are China and Europe, each manufacturing nearly a quarter of the total output, thereby making them the most prominent players in this sphere. On the other hand, North America, inclusive of the USA and Canada, stands third and has manufactured one-fifth of the global car output in 2015. Japan and Korea together contributed to 16 percent of the worldwide production, still making them noteworthy players in the car manufacturing industry.
South Asia follows with 8% of global production, which is double the quantity produced by South America that produced only 4% of total passenger cars. The smallest contribution to the global car manufacturing comes from the Middle East and Africa, with a negligible share of 2% only.
In conclusion, data shows the prominence of China, Europe and North America in the car manufacturing industry while other regions significantly lag behind in 2015.
Word count: 191 words
Essay translated in Korean:
주어진 파이 차트는 2015년에 세계 각 지역에서 승용차를 얼마나 생산했는지에 대한 데이터를 제공합니다. 이는 중국, 유럽, 북미 세 지역이 글로벌 자동차 제조 분야에서의 지배력을 분명하게 나타냅니다.
글로벌 자동차 제조 산업에 가장 크게 기여한 국가들은 중국과 유럽으로, 각각 총 생산량의 약 4분의 1을 생산하여 이 분야에서 가장 두드러진 역할을 하고 있습니다. 반면에, 미국과 캐나다를 포함한 북미는 세 번째로 많이 생산하였으며, 2015년에 글로벌 차량 생산의 5분의 1을 차지했습니다. 일본과 한국은 함께 세계 생산량의 16%를 차지하여 여전히 자동차 제조 산업에서 주목할만한 역할을 하고 있습니다.
남아시아는 글로벌 생산량의 8%로 추적하며, 이는 남아메리카에서 생산된 승용차의 양의 두 배입니다. 가장 작은 기여를 한 지역은 중동과 아프리카로, 전체의 2%만 차지하였습니다.
결론적으로, 이 데이터는 2015년에 중국, 유럽, 북미가 자동차 제조 산업에서 두드러진 위치에 있는 반면 다른 지역들은 크게 뒤처져 있음을 보여줍니다.
Good expressions:
1. dominance in global car manufacturing landscape - 글로벌 자동차 제조분야에서의 지배력
2. the most prominent players in this sphere - 이 분야에서 가장 두드러진 역할을 하는 사람들
3. making them noteworthy players - 그들을 주목할만한 플레이어로 만듭니다.
4. significantly lag behind - 크게 뒤처져 있다.
제출한 라이팅
The pie chart presents information about the construction of automobiles in 2015. Overall, what stands out from the data in the chart is that 3 regions of the world, China, Europe and North America, together produced over two thirds of the world's cars, while the rest of the world constructed a relatively small number of cars.
Turning to the details, the largest car producers on Earth are China and Europe, both made about a quarter of the planet's automobiles each. The United States of America and Canada together produced roughly one in five cars, while the total production capacity of Japan and Korea was 16 percent of worldwide output. South Asia made 8% of cars, twice as many as South America, which manufactures less than one in twenty. By far the smallest manufacture of cars is the Middle East and Africa. Their total combined output of cars accounted for only 2% the global total.
Turning to the details, the largest car producers on Earth are China and Europe, both made about a quarter of the planet's automobiles each. The United States of America and Canada together produced roughly one in five cars, while the total production capacity of Japan and Korea was 16 percent of worldwide output. South Asia made 8% of cars, twice as many as South America, which manufactures less than one in twenty. By far the smallest manufacture of cars is the Middle East and Africa. Their total combined output of cars accounted for only 2% the global total.
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