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The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Evaluation
Task Response: 8
The candidate has addressed the task effectively, covering all the data provided on the graph and making comparisons where relevant. A summary is provided at the beginning of the essay and details are elaborated subsequently.
Coherence & Cohesion: 7
The essay is easy to follow and ideas are logically arranged. However, the candidate could have used more cohesive devices to strengthen the connections between their ideas and sentences.
Lexical Resource: 8
The candidate has demonstrated a good range of vocabulary, including key terms related to the task (manufacture, proportion, percentage) and some idiomatic language (stands out, a quarter of).
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 8
The candidate has used a variety of grammatical structures accurately, showing good control of complex sentences. There are a few errors ("the half amount", "car manufactured by South Americans"), but these do not impede understanding.
Overall: 7.75
This score would be rounded to the nearest half-band, giving an overall IELTS Band 8. The candidate is able to produce clear, well-structured text on complex subjects, showing a high level of English proficiency. Minor errors and improvements for better coherence may be noted.
Task Response: 8
The candidate has addressed the task effectively, covering all the data provided on the graph and making comparisons where relevant. A summary is provided at the beginning of the essay and details are elaborated subsequently.
Coherence & Cohesion: 7
The essay is easy to follow and ideas are logically arranged. However, the candidate could have used more cohesive devices to strengthen the connections between their ideas and sentences.
Lexical Resource: 8
The candidate has demonstrated a good range of vocabulary, including key terms related to the task (manufacture, proportion, percentage) and some idiomatic language (stands out, a quarter of).
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 8
The candidate has used a variety of grammatical structures accurately, showing good control of complex sentences. There are a few errors ("the half amount", "car manufactured by South Americans"), but these do not impede understanding.
Overall: 7.75
This score would be rounded to the nearest half-band, giving an overall IELTS Band 8. The candidate is able to produce clear, well-structured text on complex subjects, showing a high level of English proficiency. Minor errors and improvements for better coherence may be noted.
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The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Essay:
The pie chart provides the data for global production of passenger vehicles by seven different regions in 2015. It predominantly reveals that the leading manufacturers were located in Asia and Europe.
A closer inspection of the chart reveals that China was at the pinnacle of the production, contributing to 26% of the global output. This was followed by Europe, contributing a quarter of the worldwide passenger vehicle production. North Americans also played a significant role in this sector with a contribution of slightly below one-fifth. Meanwhile, East Asian countries including Korea and Japan pair up to manufacture 16% of passenger vehicles, which is equivalent to the combined output from South Asia, South America, Middle East, and Africa. In contrast, South Asia was responsible for the production of 8% passenger cars, half the amount compared to East Asia.
On the lower end of the spectrum, South America and the Middle East with Africa were almost neck-to-neck with their production figures. The former produced 4% while Africa, along with the Middle East, was slightly behind at 2% of the total car manufacturing in 2015.
In conclusion, the production of passenger cars in 2015 was dominated by Asia and Europe with significant contributions also coming from North America.
Word count: 197
Essay translated in Korean:
파이 차트는 2015년에 일곱 개의 다른 지역에서 승용차 생산에 대한 데이터를 제공합니다. 주로 이는 아시아와 유럽에 위치한 주요 제조업체를 보여줍니다.
차트를 자세히 살펴보면, 중국이 생산에서 정점에 있음을 보여주며, 전체 출력의 26%를 차지했습니다. 이어서 유럽이 전 세계 승용차 생산의 1/4를 차지하였습니다. 북미도 이 분야에서 중요한 역할을 하였으며, 이는 약 1/5를 차지하였습니다. 한편, 한국과 일본을 포함한 동아시아 국가들은 승용차의 16%를 생산하였는데, 이는 남아시아, 남아메리카, 중동, 아프리카에서의 합산 출력과 동일합니다. 차이점으로, 남아시아는 승용차의 8%를 생산했는데, 이는 동아시아에 비해 절반이었습니다.
생산량이 낮은 쪽에서, 남아메리카와 중동과 아프리카는 거의 동등한 생산 수치를 보였습니다. 전자는 4%를 생산했고, 아프리카와 중동은 2015년 총 차량 제조량의 2%로 약간 뒤쳤습니다.
결론적으로, 2015년 승용차 생산은 아시아와 유럽이 주도하였고, 북미에서도 중요한 기여가 있었습니다.
Good expressions:
1. pinnacle of the production - 생산의 정점
2. significant role in this sector - 이 분야에서 중요한 역할
3. on the lower end of the spectrum - 스펙트럼의 하단
4. almost neck-to-neck - 거의 동등한
5. was dominated by - ~에 의해 지배되었다.
The pie chart provides the data for global production of passenger vehicles by seven different regions in 2015. It predominantly reveals that the leading manufacturers were located in Asia and Europe.
A closer inspection of the chart reveals that China was at the pinnacle of the production, contributing to 26% of the global output. This was followed by Europe, contributing a quarter of the worldwide passenger vehicle production. North Americans also played a significant role in this sector with a contribution of slightly below one-fifth. Meanwhile, East Asian countries including Korea and Japan pair up to manufacture 16% of passenger vehicles, which is equivalent to the combined output from South Asia, South America, Middle East, and Africa. In contrast, South Asia was responsible for the production of 8% passenger cars, half the amount compared to East Asia.
On the lower end of the spectrum, South America and the Middle East with Africa were almost neck-to-neck with their production figures. The former produced 4% while Africa, along with the Middle East, was slightly behind at 2% of the total car manufacturing in 2015.
In conclusion, the production of passenger cars in 2015 was dominated by Asia and Europe with significant contributions also coming from North America.
Word count: 197
Essay translated in Korean:
파이 차트는 2015년에 일곱 개의 다른 지역에서 승용차 생산에 대한 데이터를 제공합니다. 주로 이는 아시아와 유럽에 위치한 주요 제조업체를 보여줍니다.
차트를 자세히 살펴보면, 중국이 생산에서 정점에 있음을 보여주며, 전체 출력의 26%를 차지했습니다. 이어서 유럽이 전 세계 승용차 생산의 1/4를 차지하였습니다. 북미도 이 분야에서 중요한 역할을 하였으며, 이는 약 1/5를 차지하였습니다. 한편, 한국과 일본을 포함한 동아시아 국가들은 승용차의 16%를 생산하였는데, 이는 남아시아, 남아메리카, 중동, 아프리카에서의 합산 출력과 동일합니다. 차이점으로, 남아시아는 승용차의 8%를 생산했는데, 이는 동아시아에 비해 절반이었습니다.
생산량이 낮은 쪽에서, 남아메리카와 중동과 아프리카는 거의 동등한 생산 수치를 보였습니다. 전자는 4%를 생산했고, 아프리카와 중동은 2015년 총 차량 제조량의 2%로 약간 뒤쳤습니다.
결론적으로, 2015년 승용차 생산은 아시아와 유럽이 주도하였고, 북미에서도 중요한 기여가 있었습니다.
Good expressions:
1. pinnacle of the production - 생산의 정점
2. significant role in this sector - 이 분야에서 중요한 역할
3. on the lower end of the spectrum - 스펙트럼의 하단
4. almost neck-to-neck - 거의 동등한
5. was dominated by - ~에 의해 지배되었다.
제출한 라이팅
The pie chart indicates the proportion of automobile production by seven different areas in 2015. Overall, what stands out from the chart is that the majority of private cars are produced in Asia and Europe.
Looking at the chart more closely, it is clear that the rate of car manufacture by Chinese people was the highest in the world in 2015, accounting for 26 percent, followed by Europeans, and North Americans. A quarter of private vehicles were created in Europe, and slightly less than one fifth of cars were constructed by North Americans. East Asians involving Koreans and Japanese manufactured passenger cars as much as South Asia, South America, Middle East, and Africa combined, making up 16 percent of the total manufacture percentage. The half amount of automobiles made by East Asians were processed in South Asia in 2015, accounting for 8 percent in the world. Finally, the amount of car manufactured by South Americans, and Middle East Africans were close behind at 4% and 2% respectively in 2015.
Looking at the chart more closely, it is clear that the rate of car manufacture by Chinese people was the highest in the world in 2015, accounting for 26 percent, followed by Europeans, and North Americans. A quarter of private vehicles were created in Europe, and slightly less than one fifth of cars were constructed by North Americans. East Asians involving Koreans and Japanese manufactured passenger cars as much as South Asia, South America, Middle East, and Africa combined, making up 16 percent of the total manufacture percentage. The half amount of automobiles made by East Asians were processed in South Asia in 2015, accounting for 8 percent in the world. Finally, the amount of car manufactured by South Americans, and Middle East Africans were close behind at 4% and 2% respectively in 2015.
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