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The world of work is changing rapidly and employees cannot depend on having the same job or the same working conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes for this rapid change, and suggest ways of preparing people for the world of work
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Evaluation
Task Response: 7.0
The essay fully answers the question and presents a clear position and perspective throughout. The ideas are developed well and are supported by some relevant examples.
Coherence & Cohesion: 6.5
The essay possesses a logical sequence of ideas and is well organised into distinct paragraphs, making the overall message of the essay clear. However, there are instances where the cohesion within paragraphs needs improvement as some concepts and thoughts are not smoothly linked.
Lexical Resource: 7.0
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary to express ideas and opinions. However, the choice of words at times seems unnatural to a native speaker. There were also a few instances where words were misspelled or misused, like 'accpect' instead of 'accept'.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 6.5
The essay showcases a range of complex and simple sentence structures but these are not always grammatically accurate. There are errors in verb forms, prepositions and articles which occasionally impact the smooth flow of reading.
Overall: 6.8
The essay generally meets the requirements for the task and is mostly coherent and well-structured. The errors in grammar and cohesion do affect the overall clarity and fluency at times. The writer should focus on improving grammatical accuracy and the natural flow of ideas.
Task Response: 7.0
The essay fully answers the question and presents a clear position and perspective throughout. The ideas are developed well and are supported by some relevant examples.
Coherence & Cohesion: 6.5
The essay possesses a logical sequence of ideas and is well organised into distinct paragraphs, making the overall message of the essay clear. However, there are instances where the cohesion within paragraphs needs improvement as some concepts and thoughts are not smoothly linked.
Lexical Resource: 7.0
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary to express ideas and opinions. However, the choice of words at times seems unnatural to a native speaker. There were also a few instances where words were misspelled or misused, like 'accpect' instead of 'accept'.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 6.5
The essay showcases a range of complex and simple sentence structures but these are not always grammatically accurate. There are errors in verb forms, prepositions and articles which occasionally impact the smooth flow of reading.
Overall: 6.8
The essay generally meets the requirements for the task and is mostly coherent and well-structured. The errors in grammar and cohesion do affect the overall clarity and fluency at times. The writer should focus on improving grammatical accuracy and the natural flow of ideas.
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The world of work is changing rapidly and employees cannot depend on having the same job or the same working conditions for life.
Discuss the possible causes for this rapid change, and suggest ways of preparing people for the world of work
Essay:
The swiftly evolving dynamics of work in today’s world have created a scenario where the notion of life-long job security and consistent work conditions is largely obsolete. The accompanying discussion will highlight key contributors to this shift and propose solutions to prepare effectively for the contemporary work sphere.
Two fundamental factors drive this changing landscape: technological evolution and rapidly evolving societal trends. The continuous surge in technology, embodied in new devices including smartphones and artificial intelligence tools, has revolutionized work processes and norms. An individual hesitant to adopt such advancements often appears outdated, thus negatively affecting their work reputation. Consequently, professionals must learn to embrace technology to maintain relevance in the ever-changing workforce. Moreover, societal tastes and preferences evolve rapidly, altering demand patterns and consequently, required skillsets. Those unwilling to adapt to these shifting trends inevitably lag behind.
Preparation for this volatile work environment involves two critical steps. Primarily, individuals must cultivate an openness towards embracing new trends. Resistance to such novelties, typically stemming from cultural disparities or unfamiliarity, invariably harms earning potential and job prospects. Additionally, developing alternate income sources can provide a safety net against unforeseen career disruptions. Investment in stocks or real estate can ensure financial stability in volatile job markets.
In conclusion, swiftly emerging trends necessitate adaptability and resourcefulness to succeed in today’s volatile job landscape. Rapid acceptance of new trends and judicious financial planning can secure the future in an unpredictable work environment.
Word count: 262
Essay translated in Korean:
오늘날의 빠르게 변화하는 근무 환경은 평생 일자리 안정과 일관된 근무 조건이라는 개념을 대체적으로 야만적인 것으로 만들었습니다. 이어지는 토론에서는 이러한 변화의 주요 원인을 강조하고 현대적인 근무 영역에 효과적으로 대비하는 방법을 제안할 것입니다.
두 가지 기본적인 요소가 이 변화하는 풍경을 주도하고 있습니다: 기술의 발전과 빠르게 변화하는 사회적 트렌드. 스마트폰 및 인공 지능 도구를 포함한 새로운 기기들의 연속적인 급증으로 인해 근무 절차와 규범이 혁신되었습니다. 이러한 발전을 채택하는 데 주저하는 개인은 종종 구식으로 보이며, 따라서 그들의 근무 평판에 부정적인 영향을 미칩니다.
Good expressions:
1. "swiftly evolving dynamics" - 빠르게 변화하는 역학
2. "cultivate an openness" - 개방성을 기르다
3. "decidedly harms earning potential" - 확실히 수익 가능성을 해칩니다.
4. "Security in an unpredictable work environment" - 예측할 수 없는 작업 환경에서의 보안
5. "societal tastes and preferences evolve rapidly" - 사회적 취향과 선호도가 신속하게 발전합니다.
The swiftly evolving dynamics of work in today’s world have created a scenario where the notion of life-long job security and consistent work conditions is largely obsolete. The accompanying discussion will highlight key contributors to this shift and propose solutions to prepare effectively for the contemporary work sphere.
Two fundamental factors drive this changing landscape: technological evolution and rapidly evolving societal trends. The continuous surge in technology, embodied in new devices including smartphones and artificial intelligence tools, has revolutionized work processes and norms. An individual hesitant to adopt such advancements often appears outdated, thus negatively affecting their work reputation. Consequently, professionals must learn to embrace technology to maintain relevance in the ever-changing workforce. Moreover, societal tastes and preferences evolve rapidly, altering demand patterns and consequently, required skillsets. Those unwilling to adapt to these shifting trends inevitably lag behind.
Preparation for this volatile work environment involves two critical steps. Primarily, individuals must cultivate an openness towards embracing new trends. Resistance to such novelties, typically stemming from cultural disparities or unfamiliarity, invariably harms earning potential and job prospects. Additionally, developing alternate income sources can provide a safety net against unforeseen career disruptions. Investment in stocks or real estate can ensure financial stability in volatile job markets.
In conclusion, swiftly emerging trends necessitate adaptability and resourcefulness to succeed in today’s volatile job landscape. Rapid acceptance of new trends and judicious financial planning can secure the future in an unpredictable work environment.
Word count: 262
Essay translated in Korean:
오늘날의 빠르게 변화하는 근무 환경은 평생 일자리 안정과 일관된 근무 조건이라는 개념을 대체적으로 야만적인 것으로 만들었습니다. 이어지는 토론에서는 이러한 변화의 주요 원인을 강조하고 현대적인 근무 영역에 효과적으로 대비하는 방법을 제안할 것입니다.
두 가지 기본적인 요소가 이 변화하는 풍경을 주도하고 있습니다: 기술의 발전과 빠르게 변화하는 사회적 트렌드. 스마트폰 및 인공 지능 도구를 포함한 새로운 기기들의 연속적인 급증으로 인해 근무 절차와 규범이 혁신되었습니다. 이러한 발전을 채택하는 데 주저하는 개인은 종종 구식으로 보이며, 따라서 그들의 근무 평판에 부정적인 영향을 미칩니다.
Good expressions:
1. "swiftly evolving dynamics" - 빠르게 변화하는 역학
2. "cultivate an openness" - 개방성을 기르다
3. "decidedly harms earning potential" - 확실히 수익 가능성을 해칩니다.
4. "Security in an unpredictable work environment" - 예측할 수 없는 작업 환경에서의 보안
5. "societal tastes and preferences evolve rapidly" - 사회적 취향과 선호도가 신속하게 발전합니다.
제출한 라이팅
It is observed that since a rapid change of work in the world, the same jobs and the same working condiitons cannot satisfy employees anymore. There are some reaons why this phenomenon occurs, but there also have some ways to address this issue for the future.
On the one hand, trends are changing rapidly. If individuals cannot accept changing trends, they would be left behind, as society does not access a person who still in the past. For example, with technology advances, individuals are using various types of devices such as smartphone, computer and artificial intelligence. However, if someone still relies on newspaper or writes documents without a keyboard in the workplace, collegues will distance themesleves from them, as their work efficiency would be slow. Similarly, if someone does not keep up with advanced technology and changed trends, they cannot thrive in current society.
To tackle this issue, there are some ways to prepare for future work. Firstly, do not be sceptical about new trends. Most people resist accpecting new trends due to differences in culture and unfamiliar behaviors. To earn money, individuals should embrace popular expenditure trends, as the most spending products currently represent the most popular trends. Thus, individuals should be prepared to accept new trends. Additionally, prepare alternatives to earn a living. These days, nobody foresee the future, so individuals should prepare alternatives such as investing in stocks and purchasing property. These future measures would improve future stability. Thus, individuals should preapre to accpect new trends or future alternatives on their own.
In conclusion, as society changes rapidly and individuals cannot rely on their jobs forever, I believe that if they accpet new trends quickly and prepare for their future through investments, they can improve their quality of lives and live without concerns.
On the one hand, trends are changing rapidly. If individuals cannot accept changing trends, they would be left behind, as society does not access a person who still in the past. For example, with technology advances, individuals are using various types of devices such as smartphone, computer and artificial intelligence. However, if someone still relies on newspaper or writes documents without a keyboard in the workplace, collegues will distance themesleves from them, as their work efficiency would be slow. Similarly, if someone does not keep up with advanced technology and changed trends, they cannot thrive in current society.
To tackle this issue, there are some ways to prepare for future work. Firstly, do not be sceptical about new trends. Most people resist accpecting new trends due to differences in culture and unfamiliar behaviors. To earn money, individuals should embrace popular expenditure trends, as the most spending products currently represent the most popular trends. Thus, individuals should be prepared to accept new trends. Additionally, prepare alternatives to earn a living. These days, nobody foresee the future, so individuals should prepare alternatives such as investing in stocks and purchasing property. These future measures would improve future stability. Thus, individuals should preapre to accpect new trends or future alternatives on their own.
In conclusion, as society changes rapidly and individuals cannot rely on their jobs forever, I believe that if they accpet new trends quickly and prepare for their future through investments, they can improve their quality of lives and live without concerns.
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