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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the pulp-making process and how pulp is used to produce paper. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Evaluation
Task Response: 8
The student has presented an appropriate response to the task by clearly summarising the main features of the two diagrams. Both the stages and equipment used in the pulp-making process, and how pulp is converted into paper, are reported with suitable detail.
Coherence & Cohesion: 7
The student’s essay demonstrates good skills in organizing and linking information coherently. Clear logical progression and successful use of cohesive devices contribute to the overall readability. However, the transition between the two main paragraphs could be improved to help guide the reader through the narrative.
Lexical Resource: 7
The student has utilized a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the various processes illustrated in the diagrams. There is clear focus on precise terminology related to the diagram’s content, however, there is a certain amount of repetition, which could have been avoided with a greater variety of synonyms and expressions.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 8
Grammar usage is generally well-handled, providing a range of complex and simple sentences and good control of punctuation and tenses. A few minor errors are present, but they do not impact the readability or comprehensibility of the essay overall.
Overall: 7.5
Task Response: 8
The student has presented an appropriate response to the task by clearly summarising the main features of the two diagrams. Both the stages and equipment used in the pulp-making process, and how pulp is converted into paper, are reported with suitable detail.
Coherence & Cohesion: 7
The student’s essay demonstrates good skills in organizing and linking information coherently. Clear logical progression and successful use of cohesive devices contribute to the overall readability. However, the transition between the two main paragraphs could be improved to help guide the reader through the narrative.
Lexical Resource: 7
The student has utilized a sufficient range of vocabulary to describe the various processes illustrated in the diagrams. There is clear focus on precise terminology related to the diagram’s content, however, there is a certain amount of repetition, which could have been avoided with a greater variety of synonyms and expressions.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 8
Grammar usage is generally well-handled, providing a range of complex and simple sentences and good control of punctuation and tenses. A few minor errors are present, but they do not impact the readability or comprehensibility of the essay overall.
Overall: 7.5
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The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the pulp-making process and how pulp is used to produce paper. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Essay:
The provided diagrams vividly delineate the process of pulp production and its subsequent transformation into paper.
The initial diagram sets out to depict the pulping procedure with its respective machinery and components. The composition for pulping entails 20 percent of soft wood, 40 percent of water, and an equal proportion of chemicals. This concoction is then heated inside the pulp digester apparatus, leading to the generation of pulp.
Delving into the second illustration, the paper production process is laid out in four stages utilizing the pulp as raw material. Initially, the pulp is set evenly across a finely meshed screen. The subsequent stage involves passing the damp pulp through a sequence of drying rollers for the eradication of moisture. The pulp, now devoid of any liquid, is smoothed under an iron. The final step overseeing the journey of pulp-to-paper transformation is rolling up the finished, smooth paper onto a large reel.
In conclusion, the diagrams enlighten us about the meticulous and precise methods deployed in pulp manufacturing and its ensuing conversion into paper.
Word count: 159 words
Essay translated in Korean:
제공된 다이어그램은 펄프 제조 과정과 이후 종이로의 변환 과정을 생생하게 묘사하고 있습니다.
초기 다이어그램은 펄핑 과정과 해당 기계 및 구성 요소를 나타내고 있다. 펄프를 만들기 위한 배합은 연한 나무가 20%, 물이 40%, 그리고 동일한 비율의 화학물질이다. 이 조합은 펄프 소화기 내부에서 가열되며, 펄프가 생성된다.
두 번째 그림을 자세히 살펴보면, 펄프를 원료로 사용하여 4단계의 종이 제작 과정이 펼쳐진다. 처음에는 펄프를 세밀한 메시 화면에 고르게 펼친다. 다음 단계에서는 습기 있는 펄프를 일련의 건조 롤러를 통과시켜 수분을 제거한다. 이제 액체가 없는 펄프는 아이론 아래에서 매끄럽게 만들어진다. 펄프에서 종이 변환 과정의 마지막 단계는 완성된 매끄러운 종이를 큰 릴에 감는 것이다.
결론적으로, 이 다이어그램들은 펄프 제조와 이후의 종이로의 변환에 사용되는 세밀한 및 정확한 방법을 이해시켜 줍니다.
Good expressions:
1. Delineate - 묘사하다
2. Composition - 구성
3. Concoction - 조합
4. Devoid - ~이 없는
5. Ensuing - 이후의
6. Enlighten - 이해시키다
7. Meticulous - 세밀한
8. Precise methods - 정확한 방법.
The provided diagrams vividly delineate the process of pulp production and its subsequent transformation into paper.
The initial diagram sets out to depict the pulping procedure with its respective machinery and components. The composition for pulping entails 20 percent of soft wood, 40 percent of water, and an equal proportion of chemicals. This concoction is then heated inside the pulp digester apparatus, leading to the generation of pulp.
Delving into the second illustration, the paper production process is laid out in four stages utilizing the pulp as raw material. Initially, the pulp is set evenly across a finely meshed screen. The subsequent stage involves passing the damp pulp through a sequence of drying rollers for the eradication of moisture. The pulp, now devoid of any liquid, is smoothed under an iron. The final step overseeing the journey of pulp-to-paper transformation is rolling up the finished, smooth paper onto a large reel.
In conclusion, the diagrams enlighten us about the meticulous and precise methods deployed in pulp manufacturing and its ensuing conversion into paper.
Word count: 159 words
Essay translated in Korean:
제공된 다이어그램은 펄프 제조 과정과 이후 종이로의 변환 과정을 생생하게 묘사하고 있습니다.
초기 다이어그램은 펄핑 과정과 해당 기계 및 구성 요소를 나타내고 있다. 펄프를 만들기 위한 배합은 연한 나무가 20%, 물이 40%, 그리고 동일한 비율의 화학물질이다. 이 조합은 펄프 소화기 내부에서 가열되며, 펄프가 생성된다.
두 번째 그림을 자세히 살펴보면, 펄프를 원료로 사용하여 4단계의 종이 제작 과정이 펼쳐진다. 처음에는 펄프를 세밀한 메시 화면에 고르게 펼친다. 다음 단계에서는 습기 있는 펄프를 일련의 건조 롤러를 통과시켜 수분을 제거한다. 이제 액체가 없는 펄프는 아이론 아래에서 매끄럽게 만들어진다. 펄프에서 종이 변환 과정의 마지막 단계는 완성된 매끄러운 종이를 큰 릴에 감는 것이다.
결론적으로, 이 다이어그램들은 펄프 제조와 이후의 종이로의 변환에 사용되는 세밀한 및 정확한 방법을 이해시켜 줍니다.
Good expressions:
1. Delineate - 묘사하다
2. Composition - 구성
3. Concoction - 조합
4. Devoid - ~이 없는
5. Ensuing - 이후의
6. Enlighten - 이해시키다
7. Meticulous - 세밀한
8. Precise methods - 정확한 방법.
제출한 라이팅
The first diagram shows the equipment and stages of pulp production and the second diagram indicates how pulp is made into paper.
According to the first diagram, it is clear that three basic ingredients are combined heated, and processed to make pulp. The process begins when a blend consisting of 20 percent soft wood, 40 percent water, and 40 percent chemicals is placed into a pulp digester machine and heated. Following this, the machine expels the final product, which is pulp.
In the second diagram, it is apparent that pulp becomes paper through a four-stage process. The first step is to spread the pulp across a fine screen. After this, the pulp is moved through a series of drying rollers to remove all its moisture. It then goes through an iron, which makes it smooth. In the final step of this process, the sheet of paper is rolled up on a large reel.
According to the first diagram, it is clear that three basic ingredients are combined heated, and processed to make pulp. The process begins when a blend consisting of 20 percent soft wood, 40 percent water, and 40 percent chemicals is placed into a pulp digester machine and heated. Following this, the machine expels the final product, which is pulp.
In the second diagram, it is apparent that pulp becomes paper through a four-stage process. The first step is to spread the pulp across a fine screen. After this, the pulp is moved through a series of drying rollers to remove all its moisture. It then goes through an iron, which makes it smooth. In the final step of this process, the sheet of paper is rolled up on a large reel.
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