AI IELTS Writing AI Correction
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what vehicle is that why you like it when you would buy this vehicle in the future
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Evaluation
Task Response: 8.5
The student successfully answered all aspects of the question. They clearly explained their position, backed up their points with relevant reasons, and provided concrete examples.
Coherence & Cohesion: 8
The student organized their essay well, producing a coherent, logically-structured argument. They used linking words and cohesive devices efficiently. However, some of their transitions could be smoother.
Lexical Resource: 8.5
The student utilized a rich vocabulary, integrating some less common lexical items and technical terms related to the topic. Their word choice was precise, with rare repetition.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 8
The student demonstrated a solid command of grammatical structures and punctuation. They used a mix of complex and simple sentences effectively. A few minor mistakes do not obstruct understanding.
Overall: 8.25
The student demonstrated a very good understanding of the task. The essay is well-organized, detailed, and contains relevant arguments. Minor areas to improve could be the smoothness of transitions and a more polished use of grammar.
Task Response: 8.5
The student successfully answered all aspects of the question. They clearly explained their position, backed up their points with relevant reasons, and provided concrete examples.
Coherence & Cohesion: 8
The student organized their essay well, producing a coherent, logically-structured argument. They used linking words and cohesive devices efficiently. However, some of their transitions could be smoother.
Lexical Resource: 8.5
The student utilized a rich vocabulary, integrating some less common lexical items and technical terms related to the topic. Their word choice was precise, with rare repetition.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 8
The student demonstrated a solid command of grammatical structures and punctuation. They used a mix of complex and simple sentences effectively. A few minor mistakes do not obstruct understanding.
Overall: 8.25
The student demonstrated a very good understanding of the task. The essay is well-organized, detailed, and contains relevant arguments. Minor areas to improve could be the smoothness of transitions and a more polished use of grammar.
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what vehicle is that
why you like it
when you would buy this vehicle in the future
Essay:
The mode of transportation I have selected is the humble bicycle, a device that has been a constant presence in my life since my teenage years.
I have always held a deep affinity for bicycling, and this attachment is rooted in two main factors. To begin with, using a bicycle is vastly economical in contrast to other forms of transportation. A bicycle has minimal maintenance costs such as tire and brake updates, whereas owning a car requires additional expenditures like parking and insurance fees. Furthermore, the versatility of a bicycle is another aspect that I adore. While trains and cars are subject to geographical constraints, a bicycle can navigate through virtually any terrain, making it the ultimate flexible mode of transportation.
In terms of future purchase, I plan to acquire a bicycle when I head to the United States for my doctorate degree. My university's downtown area is rather flat, and owning a bicycle would ensure efficient commuting without breaking the bank, especially considering the high current exchange rate. I envision using this bicycle not only for commuting but also for running errands like grocery shopping. Because my backpack for school is often heavy and groceries can be bulky, having a bicycle equipped with a front basket would greatly assist in their transportation. In consequence, a bicycle is the ideal vehicle for my upcoming independent life in the United States.
In conclusion, my preferred vehicle is the bicycle due to its economical and versatile nature, and I plan to procure one when pursuing further studies in the United States.
Word count: 263 words
Essay translated in Korean:
선택한 교통 수단은 청소년 시절부터 내 생활의 일부가 된 일명 자전거입니다.
자전거에 대한 이러한 애정은 두 가지 주요한 요인에서 기인합니다. 첫째, 자전거를 사용하는 것은 다른 교통 수단에 비해 경제적입니다. 타이어와 브레이크의 유지 비용이 약간 들 뿐이지만, 차를 소유하면 주차 및 보험 비용과 같은 추가 비용이 발생합니다. 또한 자전거의 다양성도 매력 중 하나입니다. 기차와 자동차는 지리적 제약에 따르지만, 자전거는 거의 모든 지형을 통과할 수 있어 궁극적으로 유연한 교통 수단입니다.
미래의 구매에 대해 말하자면, 나는 미국에서 박사 학위를 받기 위해 갈 때 자전거를 구입할 계획입니다. 내 대학의 시내 지역은 대체로 평평하고, 현재 환율이 매우 높은 상태에서 자전거 소유는 효율적인 출퇴근을 보장할 것입니다. 이 자전거는 학교로 출퇴근하기 위한 것뿐만 아니라 식료품 쇼핑과 같은 심부름을 하기 위해서도 사용할 계획입니다. 학교용 가방이 종종 무겁고 식료품도 크기 때문에 앞 바구니가 장착된 자전거는 이들을 운반하는 데 크게 도움이 될 것입니다. 결국, 자전거는 내가 미국에서 독립 생활을 시작할 때 이상적인 차량입니다.
결론적으로, 경제적이고 다양성이 있는 자전거라는 이유로 내가 선호하는 차량이며, 나는 미국에서 진학을 계속할 때 한 대를 구입할 계획이다.
Good expressions:
1. deep affinity - 깊은 애정
2. subject to geographical constraints - 지리적 제약에 따르다
3. navigate through virtually any terrain - 거의 모든 지형을 통과할 수 있다
4. breaking the bank - 재정을 초과하는
5. running errands - 심부름을 하다
6. equipped with a front basket - 앞 바구니가 장착된
7. independent life - 독립 생활
8. procure one - 한 대를 구입하다
The mode of transportation I have selected is the humble bicycle, a device that has been a constant presence in my life since my teenage years.
I have always held a deep affinity for bicycling, and this attachment is rooted in two main factors. To begin with, using a bicycle is vastly economical in contrast to other forms of transportation. A bicycle has minimal maintenance costs such as tire and brake updates, whereas owning a car requires additional expenditures like parking and insurance fees. Furthermore, the versatility of a bicycle is another aspect that I adore. While trains and cars are subject to geographical constraints, a bicycle can navigate through virtually any terrain, making it the ultimate flexible mode of transportation.
In terms of future purchase, I plan to acquire a bicycle when I head to the United States for my doctorate degree. My university's downtown area is rather flat, and owning a bicycle would ensure efficient commuting without breaking the bank, especially considering the high current exchange rate. I envision using this bicycle not only for commuting but also for running errands like grocery shopping. Because my backpack for school is often heavy and groceries can be bulky, having a bicycle equipped with a front basket would greatly assist in their transportation. In consequence, a bicycle is the ideal vehicle for my upcoming independent life in the United States.
In conclusion, my preferred vehicle is the bicycle due to its economical and versatile nature, and I plan to procure one when pursuing further studies in the United States.
Word count: 263 words
Essay translated in Korean:
선택한 교통 수단은 청소년 시절부터 내 생활의 일부가 된 일명 자전거입니다.
자전거에 대한 이러한 애정은 두 가지 주요한 요인에서 기인합니다. 첫째, 자전거를 사용하는 것은 다른 교통 수단에 비해 경제적입니다. 타이어와 브레이크의 유지 비용이 약간 들 뿐이지만, 차를 소유하면 주차 및 보험 비용과 같은 추가 비용이 발생합니다. 또한 자전거의 다양성도 매력 중 하나입니다. 기차와 자동차는 지리적 제약에 따르지만, 자전거는 거의 모든 지형을 통과할 수 있어 궁극적으로 유연한 교통 수단입니다.
미래의 구매에 대해 말하자면, 나는 미국에서 박사 학위를 받기 위해 갈 때 자전거를 구입할 계획입니다. 내 대학의 시내 지역은 대체로 평평하고, 현재 환율이 매우 높은 상태에서 자전거 소유는 효율적인 출퇴근을 보장할 것입니다. 이 자전거는 학교로 출퇴근하기 위한 것뿐만 아니라 식료품 쇼핑과 같은 심부름을 하기 위해서도 사용할 계획입니다. 학교용 가방이 종종 무겁고 식료품도 크기 때문에 앞 바구니가 장착된 자전거는 이들을 운반하는 데 크게 도움이 될 것입니다. 결국, 자전거는 내가 미국에서 독립 생활을 시작할 때 이상적인 차량입니다.
결론적으로, 경제적이고 다양성이 있는 자전거라는 이유로 내가 선호하는 차량이며, 나는 미국에서 진학을 계속할 때 한 대를 구입할 계획이다.
Good expressions:
1. deep affinity - 깊은 애정
2. subject to geographical constraints - 지리적 제약에 따르다
3. navigate through virtually any terrain - 거의 모든 지형을 통과할 수 있다
4. breaking the bank - 재정을 초과하는
5. running errands - 심부름을 하다
6. equipped with a front basket - 앞 바구니가 장착된
7. independent life - 독립 생활
8. procure one - 한 대를 구입하다
제출한 라이팅
The vehicle which I have chosen is a bicycle. A bicycle has been the most familiar vehicle to me since I was a teenager. I frequently rode a bicycle whenever I commuted to school or traveled to other cities. I even had the experience of traversing the whole country using only my bicycle.
I love bicycles for two essential reasons. Firstly, they are very economical. This is because a bicycle requires only maintenance costs such as tire and brake expenses. If I used a car for transportation, it would incur many costs like parking fees and insurance. Secondly, bicycles can go everywhere. In the case of trains, they can travel only on tracks, and cars can drive only on roads. However, bicycles can traverse even rocky terrain. As a result, due to their economical nature and flexibility, I love bicycles.
I would buy a bicycle when I go to the U.S. university for my Ph.D. degree. The downtown area of my university is almost flat, so a bicycle is a very efficient vehicle for commuting to school. Nowadays, the exchange rate is very high, so I think I cannot afford a car. A bicycle would be a very useful substitute for transportation. Therefore, I would buy a bicycle as soon as I arrive there.
I would use a bicycle for commuting to school and grocery shopping. The bag I use is often very heavy for commuting to school, so walking is challenging. A bicycle can help me transport my heavy bag. Grocery shopping involves a lot of luggage, and bicycles often have a storage basket in front to keep the groceries. Therefore, a bicycle is a very useful vehicle for living in the U.S. on my own.
I love bicycles for two essential reasons. Firstly, they are very economical. This is because a bicycle requires only maintenance costs such as tire and brake expenses. If I used a car for transportation, it would incur many costs like parking fees and insurance. Secondly, bicycles can go everywhere. In the case of trains, they can travel only on tracks, and cars can drive only on roads. However, bicycles can traverse even rocky terrain. As a result, due to their economical nature and flexibility, I love bicycles.
I would buy a bicycle when I go to the U.S. university for my Ph.D. degree. The downtown area of my university is almost flat, so a bicycle is a very efficient vehicle for commuting to school. Nowadays, the exchange rate is very high, so I think I cannot afford a car. A bicycle would be a very useful substitute for transportation. Therefore, I would buy a bicycle as soon as I arrive there.
I would use a bicycle for commuting to school and grocery shopping. The bag I use is often very heavy for commuting to school, so walking is challenging. A bicycle can help me transport my heavy bag. Grocery shopping involves a lot of luggage, and bicycles often have a storage basket in front to keep the groceries. Therefore, a bicycle is a very useful vehicle for living in the U.S. on my own.
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