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Some countries invest in specialized sports facilities for top athletes but not for the average people. Is this a positive or negative development?
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Evaluation
Task Response: 8
The student addresses all parts of the task. The argument is relevant, substantiated, and well structured. Both sides of the issue are well represented.
Coherence & Cohiciency: 7.5
There is clear and evident logical progression of information and ideas throughout the essay. However, a bit more sophisticated use of cohesive devices and referencing can further enhance coherence.
Lexical Resource: 8
The essay shows a good range of vocabulary, including less common lexis. The student uses vocabulary with precision and showcases a strong awareness of collocation.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 7.5
The grammatical structures are fairly complex and are mostly used accurately. Errors are infrequent and minor, and do not impede comprehension. More varied sentence structures could enhance this score.
Overall: 7.8
Task Response: 8
The student addresses all parts of the task. The argument is relevant, substantiated, and well structured. Both sides of the issue are well represented.
Coherence & Cohiciency: 7.5
There is clear and evident logical progression of information and ideas throughout the essay. However, a bit more sophisticated use of cohesive devices and referencing can further enhance coherence.
Lexical Resource: 8
The essay shows a good range of vocabulary, including less common lexis. The student uses vocabulary with precision and showcases a strong awareness of collocation.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 7.5
The grammatical structures are fairly complex and are mostly used accurately. Errors are infrequent and minor, and do not impede comprehension. More varied sentence structures could enhance this score.
Overall: 7.8
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Some countries invest in specialized sports facilities for top athletes but not for the average people. Is this a positive or negative development?
Essay:
The increase in the number of elite-level sports facilities in various countries has led to debates about the accessibility of these facilities to the common man. Although there are some undeniable merits of these specialized constructions, the implications of neglecting the fitness needs of the average citizen cannot be overlooked.
One of the positive aspects of this trend is that, providing first-class infrastructure for elite athletes often plays a key role in their success in global contests, which can enhance the nation's prestige and even stimulate the economy through tourism. For instance, South Korea's government-funded ice rink has equipped its figure skaters to excel in worldwide tournaments, boosting the nation's profile and contributing to economic growth.
On the contrary, the allocation of resources exclusively for professional athletes could be seen as a neglect of the general populace's wellness. Regular citizens too require access to quality sports facilities for their health and recreation. Tourist attractions like Pyeongchang's winter sports venues, though constructed for elite athletes, are underused in off-seasons, leading to discontent among local residents who could benefit from their availability. Making these facilities more accessible would enable the majority to partake in regular physical activity.
In conclusion, while supporting top athletes is indeed pivotal, the needs of the average citizen should not be discounted. Governments need to ensure that sports facilities cater to all, emphasizing not just national pride, but also public health.
Word count: 260
Essay translated in Korean:
다양한 국가에서 엘리트급 스포츠 시설의 수가 증가함에 따라 이러한 시설을 일반인들이 접근하는 것에 대한 토론이 생겼습니다. 이러한 전문 건축의 장점이 분명히 있지만, 평범한 시민의 건강 요구를 무시하는 그 뜻을 간과할 수 없습니다.
이 트렌드의 긍정적인 측면 중 하나는 국제 대회에서 엘리트 선수들의 성공에 첫 번째 클래스 인프라가 중요한 역할을 하는 것입니다. 이는 국가의 명성을 향상시키고 심지어 관광을 통해 경제를 촉진할 수 있습니다. 예를 들어, 대한민국의 정부 지원 아이스링크는 그들의 피겨 스케이터가 전 세계 대회에서 탁월한 성과를 거두게 해, 국가의 프로필을 높이고 경제 성장에 기여하였습니다.
반대로, 전문 선수들만을 위한 자원의 배정은 일반 인구의 웰빙을 무시하는 것으로 볼 수 있습니다. 일반 시민들도 건강과 여가를 위해 고급 스포츠 시설에 접근해야 합니다. 평창의 겨울 스포츠 관광지와 같은 관광 명소들이 비수기에는 쓰이지 않는다는 것이 이런 예를 들 수 있는데, 이는 현지 주민들이 시설의 유용성을 사용하게 함으로 인해 불만을 초래하였습니다. 이러한 시설을 더욱 접근 가능한 곳으로 만든다면, 대다수의 사람들이 정기적인 신체 활동에 참여할 수 있을 것입니다.
결론적으로, 톱 선수들을 지원하는 것이 매우 중요하기는 하지만, 일반 시민의 요구도 고려해야 합니다. 정부는 스포츠 시설이 모든 사람을 위한 것임을 확실히 해야 하며, 이는 국가의 자부심뿐만 아니라 대중의 건강을 강조해야 합니다.
Good expressions:
1. undeniable merits – 부인할 수 없는 디점
2. enhance the nation's prestige – 국가의 명성을 향상시키다
3. fitness needs of the average citizen – 일반 시민의 건강 요구
4. contribute to economic growth – 경제성장에 기여하다
5. cater to all – 모두를 만족시키다
6. emphasizing not just national pride, but also public health – 국가의 자부심뿐만 아니라 대중의 건강도 강조하는.
The increase in the number of elite-level sports facilities in various countries has led to debates about the accessibility of these facilities to the common man. Although there are some undeniable merits of these specialized constructions, the implications of neglecting the fitness needs of the average citizen cannot be overlooked.
One of the positive aspects of this trend is that, providing first-class infrastructure for elite athletes often plays a key role in their success in global contests, which can enhance the nation's prestige and even stimulate the economy through tourism. For instance, South Korea's government-funded ice rink has equipped its figure skaters to excel in worldwide tournaments, boosting the nation's profile and contributing to economic growth.
On the contrary, the allocation of resources exclusively for professional athletes could be seen as a neglect of the general populace's wellness. Regular citizens too require access to quality sports facilities for their health and recreation. Tourist attractions like Pyeongchang's winter sports venues, though constructed for elite athletes, are underused in off-seasons, leading to discontent among local residents who could benefit from their availability. Making these facilities more accessible would enable the majority to partake in regular physical activity.
In conclusion, while supporting top athletes is indeed pivotal, the needs of the average citizen should not be discounted. Governments need to ensure that sports facilities cater to all, emphasizing not just national pride, but also public health.
Word count: 260
Essay translated in Korean:
다양한 국가에서 엘리트급 스포츠 시설의 수가 증가함에 따라 이러한 시설을 일반인들이 접근하는 것에 대한 토론이 생겼습니다. 이러한 전문 건축의 장점이 분명히 있지만, 평범한 시민의 건강 요구를 무시하는 그 뜻을 간과할 수 없습니다.
이 트렌드의 긍정적인 측면 중 하나는 국제 대회에서 엘리트 선수들의 성공에 첫 번째 클래스 인프라가 중요한 역할을 하는 것입니다. 이는 국가의 명성을 향상시키고 심지어 관광을 통해 경제를 촉진할 수 있습니다. 예를 들어, 대한민국의 정부 지원 아이스링크는 그들의 피겨 스케이터가 전 세계 대회에서 탁월한 성과를 거두게 해, 국가의 프로필을 높이고 경제 성장에 기여하였습니다.
반대로, 전문 선수들만을 위한 자원의 배정은 일반 인구의 웰빙을 무시하는 것으로 볼 수 있습니다. 일반 시민들도 건강과 여가를 위해 고급 스포츠 시설에 접근해야 합니다. 평창의 겨울 스포츠 관광지와 같은 관광 명소들이 비수기에는 쓰이지 않는다는 것이 이런 예를 들 수 있는데, 이는 현지 주민들이 시설의 유용성을 사용하게 함으로 인해 불만을 초래하였습니다. 이러한 시설을 더욱 접근 가능한 곳으로 만든다면, 대다수의 사람들이 정기적인 신체 활동에 참여할 수 있을 것입니다.
결론적으로, 톱 선수들을 지원하는 것이 매우 중요하기는 하지만, 일반 시민의 요구도 고려해야 합니다. 정부는 스포츠 시설이 모든 사람을 위한 것임을 확실히 해야 하며, 이는 국가의 자부심뿐만 아니라 대중의 건강을 강조해야 합니다.
Good expressions:
1. undeniable merits – 부인할 수 없는 디점
2. enhance the nation's prestige – 국가의 명성을 향상시키다
3. fitness needs of the average citizen – 일반 시민의 건강 요구
4. contribute to economic growth – 경제성장에 기여하다
5. cater to all – 모두를 만족시키다
6. emphasizing not just national pride, but also public health – 국가의 자부심뿐만 아니라 대중의 건강도 강조하는.
제출한 라이팅
A growing number of sports facilities designed for high-profile athletes are being constructed in many countries, but this investment is often criticized for not taking access among the general public into account. While building arenas specifically for sportspeople offers significant advantages, it may not necessarily be a positive development.
One compelling argument is that top-tier players require adequate facilities to achieve peak performance, which can contribute to raising national pride and boosting the country’s tourism, thereby leading to economic growth. Hence, it is reasonable to assert that governments allocate enormous expenses to creating state-of-the-art facilities specialized for certain kinds of sports. For example, in South Korea, a new ice rink was built for figure skating players, supported by government funding. The athletes showcased excellent performance in international competitions, including the Olympics. Consequently, investment in improving their conditions holds significant value.
However, it may be a waste of resources to construct sports facilities exclusively for sportspeople. While it is true that they should be supported, the general population also needs easy access to spaces where they can engage in sports and physical activities to maintain their health. For instance, in Pyeongchang, although many buildings were constructed for winter sports athletes, these facilities are of little use at certain times of the year. As a result, many locals often complain that these facilities should be accessible to the public. It would have been better if these facilities had been made more practical for the majority of ordinary people, who could then more frequently engage in exercise or play sports.
In conclusion, whether investing in specialized sports facilities for top athletes is necessary demands careful deliberation, including consideration of additional facets mentioned above. While governments should undoubtedly provide financial support, it is equally imperative that public facilities are accessible to all citizens, not solely professional sportspeople.
One compelling argument is that top-tier players require adequate facilities to achieve peak performance, which can contribute to raising national pride and boosting the country’s tourism, thereby leading to economic growth. Hence, it is reasonable to assert that governments allocate enormous expenses to creating state-of-the-art facilities specialized for certain kinds of sports. For example, in South Korea, a new ice rink was built for figure skating players, supported by government funding. The athletes showcased excellent performance in international competitions, including the Olympics. Consequently, investment in improving their conditions holds significant value.
However, it may be a waste of resources to construct sports facilities exclusively for sportspeople. While it is true that they should be supported, the general population also needs easy access to spaces where they can engage in sports and physical activities to maintain their health. For instance, in Pyeongchang, although many buildings were constructed for winter sports athletes, these facilities are of little use at certain times of the year. As a result, many locals often complain that these facilities should be accessible to the public. It would have been better if these facilities had been made more practical for the majority of ordinary people, who could then more frequently engage in exercise or play sports.
In conclusion, whether investing in specialized sports facilities for top athletes is necessary demands careful deliberation, including consideration of additional facets mentioned above. While governments should undoubtedly provide financial support, it is equally imperative that public facilities are accessible to all citizens, not solely professional sportspeople.
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