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In today’s digital age, anyone with a smartphone can capture and share photographs. this accessibility to photography diminishes the value of professional photographers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Evaluation
Task Response: 7
The essay does address the task directly, presenting a clear argument to support the relevance of professional photographers despite the technological advancements in smartphone cameras. However, some of the arguments lack depth and the analysis of the impact of technology on professional photography could have been explored more thoroughly.
Coherence & Cohesion: 7
The essay is logically structured, with clear progression of ideas from introduction to conclusion. It could, however, benefit from stronger topic sentences and further elaboration of ideas to strengthen coherence.
Lexical Resource: 8
Overall, the writer demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and collocations. There are a few minor mistakes but they do not significantly hinder understanding.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 6
The essay has good grammatical complexity, though with a few errors (e.g. "there is no need the professional photographers"). Plural-singular agreement and article usage need improving.
Overall: 7
The essay meets the task requirements and communicates the ideas effectively, although some grammatical inaccuracies and coherence issues are present. With improvements in these areas, it could reach a higher band score.
Task Response: 7
The essay does address the task directly, presenting a clear argument to support the relevance of professional photographers despite the technological advancements in smartphone cameras. However, some of the arguments lack depth and the analysis of the impact of technology on professional photography could have been explored more thoroughly.
Coherence & Cohesion: 7
The essay is logically structured, with clear progression of ideas from introduction to conclusion. It could, however, benefit from stronger topic sentences and further elaboration of ideas to strengthen coherence.
Lexical Resource: 8
Overall, the writer demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and collocations. There are a few minor mistakes but they do not significantly hinder understanding.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 6
The essay has good grammatical complexity, though with a few errors (e.g. "there is no need the professional photographers"). Plural-singular agreement and article usage need improving.
Overall: 7
The essay meets the task requirements and communicates the ideas effectively, although some grammatical inaccuracies and coherence issues are present. With improvements in these areas, it could reach a higher band score.
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In today’s digital age, anyone with a smartphone can capture and share photographs. this accessibility to photography diminishes the value of professional photographers.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Essay:
In the current digital age, smartphone photography has become prevalent, leading to debates on the perceived decline in the value of professional photographers. The premise of my argument, however, refutes this perception.
Smartphones, with their improved camera options, is a testament to the innovative competition among tech companies. Despite the high-quality images they produce, their capabilities are no match for advanced professional cameras. For instance, capturing detailed wildlife photography would require zoom capabilities beyond the reach of any smartphone, as professional cameras possess nearly 200 times greater zooming potential.
Furthermore, photography extends beyond the realm of technology and into the domain of art. It necessitates not just superior equipment, but also artistic aptitude and technical knowledge. To click candid family photos or scenic landscapes is within anyone’s grasp, but crafting stunning portraits that evoke emotion and admiration requires the practiced hand and keen eye of a professional photographer. Even with the finest smartphone, well-composed and skilfully shot photographs are expectedly the forte of professionals.
In summation, while the advent of high-tech smartphones may seem to threaten the prominence of professional photographers, the integral role they play in capturing cherished moments and stunning shots remains indispensable.
Word count: 181 words
Essay translated in Korean:
현대 디지털 시대에 스마트폰으로 대중적인 사진촬영이 일반화되면서, 프로페셔널 사진작가의 가치가 하락한 것으로 인식되는 논쟁이 벌어지고 있습니다. 그러나 나의 주장은 이런 인식을 거부합니다.
향상된 카메라 옵션을 갖춘 스마트폰은 곧 기술 회사들 사이의 혁신적인 경쟁의 증거입니다. 그들이 생산하는 고화질 사진에도 불구하고, 그들의 능력은 전문적인 카메라에 미치지 못합니다. 예를 들어, 상세한 야생동물 사진을 촬영하기 위해서는 스마트폰의 한계를 넘어선 줌 기능이 필요하며, 프로 카메라는 스마트폰의 줌능력보다 거의 200배 더 큰 줌능력을 가지고 있습니다.
또한, 사진은 기술 영역을 넘어서 예술의 영역에 속합니다. 이것은 뛰어난 장비뿐만 아니라 예술적인 재능과 기술 지식을 필요로 합니다. 가족사진 또는 경치 좋은 풍경을 촬영하는 것은 누구에게나 가능하지만, 감동과 칭찬을 이끌어내는 뛰어난 초상화를 형성하는 것은 연습된 손과 예술적인 눈을 필요로 하는 프로 편견사의 전유물입니다.
요약하자면, 고급 스마트폰의 등장이 프로 편견사의 두각성을 위협하는 것처럼 보일지라도, 그들이 소중한 순간과 뛰어난 화상을 촬영하는데 중요한 역할을 하는 것은 부정할 수 없습니다.
Good expressions:
1. Predominance: 두각성
2. Evoke: 이끌어내는
3. Indispensable: 필수적인
4. Candid: 솔직한
5. Artistic aptitude: 예술적인 재능
6. Caviates: 한계
7. Debates: 논쟁
8. Refute: 거부
In the current digital age, smartphone photography has become prevalent, leading to debates on the perceived decline in the value of professional photographers. The premise of my argument, however, refutes this perception.
Smartphones, with their improved camera options, is a testament to the innovative competition among tech companies. Despite the high-quality images they produce, their capabilities are no match for advanced professional cameras. For instance, capturing detailed wildlife photography would require zoom capabilities beyond the reach of any smartphone, as professional cameras possess nearly 200 times greater zooming potential.
Furthermore, photography extends beyond the realm of technology and into the domain of art. It necessitates not just superior equipment, but also artistic aptitude and technical knowledge. To click candid family photos or scenic landscapes is within anyone’s grasp, but crafting stunning portraits that evoke emotion and admiration requires the practiced hand and keen eye of a professional photographer. Even with the finest smartphone, well-composed and skilfully shot photographs are expectedly the forte of professionals.
In summation, while the advent of high-tech smartphones may seem to threaten the prominence of professional photographers, the integral role they play in capturing cherished moments and stunning shots remains indispensable.
Word count: 181 words
Essay translated in Korean:
현대 디지털 시대에 스마트폰으로 대중적인 사진촬영이 일반화되면서, 프로페셔널 사진작가의 가치가 하락한 것으로 인식되는 논쟁이 벌어지고 있습니다. 그러나 나의 주장은 이런 인식을 거부합니다.
향상된 카메라 옵션을 갖춘 스마트폰은 곧 기술 회사들 사이의 혁신적인 경쟁의 증거입니다. 그들이 생산하는 고화질 사진에도 불구하고, 그들의 능력은 전문적인 카메라에 미치지 못합니다. 예를 들어, 상세한 야생동물 사진을 촬영하기 위해서는 스마트폰의 한계를 넘어선 줌 기능이 필요하며, 프로 카메라는 스마트폰의 줌능력보다 거의 200배 더 큰 줌능력을 가지고 있습니다.
또한, 사진은 기술 영역을 넘어서 예술의 영역에 속합니다. 이것은 뛰어난 장비뿐만 아니라 예술적인 재능과 기술 지식을 필요로 합니다. 가족사진 또는 경치 좋은 풍경을 촬영하는 것은 누구에게나 가능하지만, 감동과 칭찬을 이끌어내는 뛰어난 초상화를 형성하는 것은 연습된 손과 예술적인 눈을 필요로 하는 프로 편견사의 전유물입니다.
요약하자면, 고급 스마트폰의 등장이 프로 편견사의 두각성을 위협하는 것처럼 보일지라도, 그들이 소중한 순간과 뛰어난 화상을 촬영하는데 중요한 역할을 하는 것은 부정할 수 없습니다.
Good expressions:
1. Predominance: 두각성
2. Evoke: 이끌어내는
3. Indispensable: 필수적인
4. Candid: 솔직한
5. Artistic aptitude: 예술적인 재능
6. Caviates: 한계
7. Debates: 논쟁
8. Refute: 거부
제출한 라이팅
Nowadays photos taken by smartphones have great quality that many individuals may think that there is no need the professional photographers in this high-tech era.
In this modern world, companies compete with each other through innovative ways. Smartphones companies add options to their cameras to encourage customers to buy their product. However, cameras are advancing every day and becoming more complex for capturing high-quality photos. For example, nobody can take a wildlife photograph with just a phone, as wildlife photographers use cameras with zoom capabilities almost 200 times higher than those of phone.
Furthermore, photography is an art, so it needs talent and enough knowledge. While Individuals with smartphones can take photos of their families or nature, it does not mean they capture standard photos. Professional photographers have years of experience and education in this field, so that they can take a justifiable photo that everyone admire.
Some might argue that some smartphones are capable of taking photos even better than cameras. However, these photos may only look good on the mobile phone, and when printed, they cannot compete with camera shots.
In conclusion, while some people believe that smartphone can decrease the value of photography profession, I think cameras are still superior to phones because of above mentioned reasons. Moreover, Photography requires knowledge and talent, so society needs professional photography.
In this modern world, companies compete with each other through innovative ways. Smartphones companies add options to their cameras to encourage customers to buy their product. However, cameras are advancing every day and becoming more complex for capturing high-quality photos. For example, nobody can take a wildlife photograph with just a phone, as wildlife photographers use cameras with zoom capabilities almost 200 times higher than those of phone.
Furthermore, photography is an art, so it needs talent and enough knowledge. While Individuals with smartphones can take photos of their families or nature, it does not mean they capture standard photos. Professional photographers have years of experience and education in this field, so that they can take a justifiable photo that everyone admire.
Some might argue that some smartphones are capable of taking photos even better than cameras. However, these photos may only look good on the mobile phone, and when printed, they cannot compete with camera shots.
In conclusion, while some people believe that smartphone can decrease the value of photography profession, I think cameras are still superior to phones because of above mentioned reasons. Moreover, Photography requires knowledge and talent, so society needs professional photography.
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