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In today’s digital age, anyone with a smartphone can capture and share photographs. this accessibility to photography diminishes the value of professional photographers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Evaluation
Task Response: 6.0
The student effectively addresses all parts of the task, expressing a clear opinion and providing appropriate reasons and examples to support their viewpoint. Their argument, however, could be enhanced by discussing the other viewpoint more seriously and offering a counterargument to show an understanding of different perspectives on the issue.
Coherence & Cohesion: 6.5
The essay is well-structured and logically organized, with a clear introduction, supporting paragraphs, and conclusion. Ideas are linked through a range of cohesive devices. However, at times, the ideas fail to flow together, and the coherence is slightly muddled, with some unclear transitions between concepts.
Lexical Resource: 6.0
The student demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, with some less common words and phrases used accurately. However, there are occasions when word choice is inappropriate or awkwardly used. The usage of idiomatic language could be improved.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 5.0
Sentences show a reasonable range of structures, but there are several instances where incorrect usage obscures the meaning. The essay contains several grammatical errors, such as wrong verb tense and missing articles before nouns.
Overall: 6.0
The student generally shows a satisfactory understanding of the question and has presented a relevant response, but there are significant areas for improvement, especially in the accuracy of the language used and in the development of the argument. The student should work on polishing their grammar and exploring the issue more deeply.
Task Response: 6.0
The student effectively addresses all parts of the task, expressing a clear opinion and providing appropriate reasons and examples to support their viewpoint. Their argument, however, could be enhanced by discussing the other viewpoint more seriously and offering a counterargument to show an understanding of different perspectives on the issue.
Coherence & Cohesion: 6.5
The essay is well-structured and logically organized, with a clear introduction, supporting paragraphs, and conclusion. Ideas are linked through a range of cohesive devices. However, at times, the ideas fail to flow together, and the coherence is slightly muddled, with some unclear transitions between concepts.
Lexical Resource: 6.0
The student demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, with some less common words and phrases used accurately. However, there are occasions when word choice is inappropriate or awkwardly used. The usage of idiomatic language could be improved.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 5.0
Sentences show a reasonable range of structures, but there are several instances where incorrect usage obscures the meaning. The essay contains several grammatical errors, such as wrong verb tense and missing articles before nouns.
Overall: 6.0
The student generally shows a satisfactory understanding of the question and has presented a relevant response, but there are significant areas for improvement, especially in the accuracy of the language used and in the development of the argument. The student should work on polishing their grammar and exploring the issue more deeply.
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In today’s digital age, anyone with a smartphone can capture and share photographs. this accessibility to photography diminishes the value of professional photographers.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Essay:
In our technologically advanced times, some question the relevance of professional photographers when anyone with a smartphone can take and share images instantly. To this, I partly disagree that this newfound accessibility diminishes the importance of professional photographers.
The proliferation of sophisticated smartphone cameras has undeniably empowered individuals to capture their world, leading some to believe that professional photographers are redundant. Technological companies compete to offer increasingly advanced cameras, appealing to consumers' desire to capture high-quality imagery. However, the intricacies of professional photography go beyond the scope of a phone camera. For instance, capturing wildlife photography requires cameras with zoom capabilities far exceeding that of a standard smartphone. Such specialized scenarios, demand the expertise and equipment of professional photographers, not available with mere smartphones.
Furthermore, photography is a multilayered art requiring not only the correct equipment but also talent, skill, and knowledge. While smartphone users may photograph family gatherings or landscapes, creating a photograph that truly captures the essence or the story of a scene is in the realm of professional photographers. Their years of training and experience enables them to produce artistic and engaging images that exceed the capabilities of a casual snap by a smartphone user.
In conclusion, while the advent of high-quality smartphone cameras has democratised photography to an extent, it has in no way erased the importance of professional photographers. Their knowledge, skills, and distinctive perspective continue to be irreplaceable in producing captivating images of our world.
Word Count: 263 words
Essay translated in Korean:
기술적으로 진보한 우리 시대에서는 스마트폰을 가진 누구나 즉시 사진을 찍고 공유할 수 있기 때문에 전문 사진작가의 중요성을 의문시하는 사람들이 있습니다. 이에 대해 저는 새로운 접근성이 전문 사진작가의 중요성을 줄인다는것에 부분적으로 동의하지 않습니다.
섬세한 스마트폰 카메라의 확산은 무조건적으로 개인들에게 그들의 세계를 포착하는 능력을 부여했지만, 이로 인해 전문 사진작가가 불필요하다는 믿음을 일부 사람들에게 심었습니다. 기술 회사들은 품질 높은 이미지를 찍고 싶은 소비자의 욕구에 어필하기 위해 점점 발전된 카메라를 제공합니다. 하지만, 전문 사진술의 복잡성은 폰 카메라의 범위를 넘어갑니다. 예를 들어, 야생동물 사진술을 포착하는 것은 일반 스마트폰을 훨씬 능가하는 줌 기능을 필요로 합니다. 이러한 특수한 상황들은 전문 사진작가의 전문성과 장비를 요구하며, 단순한 스마트폰으로는 이를 대체할 수 없습니다.
게다가, 사진술은 올바른 장비뿐 아니라 재능, 기술, 지식을 요구하는 다면적인 예술입니다. 스마트폰 사용자들이 가족 모임이나 풍경을 사진찍을 수는 있지만, 장면의 본질이나 사건을 정확하게 담아낼 수 있는 사진은 전문 사진작가의 영역입니다. 그들의 훈련과 경험은 수십 년의 훈련을 받아 사랑 받는 대중적인 이미지를 초월하기 위해 필요한 것입니다.
결론적으로, 고품질 스마트폰 카메라의 등장이 사진술을 어느 정도 균등하게 만들었지만, 전문 사진작가의 중요성은 전혀 사라지지 않았습니다. 그들의 지식, 기술, 그리고 독특한 시각은 우리 세상의 매혹적인 이미지를 만들어내는 데 있어 여전히 대체 불가능합니다.
Good expressions:
1. proliferate - 확산되다
2. intricacies - 복잡성
3. multilayered art - 다면적인 예술
4. democratise - 균등하게 하다
5. distinctive perspective - 독특한 시각
6. irreplaceable - 대체 불가능하다
In our technologically advanced times, some question the relevance of professional photographers when anyone with a smartphone can take and share images instantly. To this, I partly disagree that this newfound accessibility diminishes the importance of professional photographers.
The proliferation of sophisticated smartphone cameras has undeniably empowered individuals to capture their world, leading some to believe that professional photographers are redundant. Technological companies compete to offer increasingly advanced cameras, appealing to consumers' desire to capture high-quality imagery. However, the intricacies of professional photography go beyond the scope of a phone camera. For instance, capturing wildlife photography requires cameras with zoom capabilities far exceeding that of a standard smartphone. Such specialized scenarios, demand the expertise and equipment of professional photographers, not available with mere smartphones.
Furthermore, photography is a multilayered art requiring not only the correct equipment but also talent, skill, and knowledge. While smartphone users may photograph family gatherings or landscapes, creating a photograph that truly captures the essence or the story of a scene is in the realm of professional photographers. Their years of training and experience enables them to produce artistic and engaging images that exceed the capabilities of a casual snap by a smartphone user.
In conclusion, while the advent of high-quality smartphone cameras has democratised photography to an extent, it has in no way erased the importance of professional photographers. Their knowledge, skills, and distinctive perspective continue to be irreplaceable in producing captivating images of our world.
Word Count: 263 words
Essay translated in Korean:
기술적으로 진보한 우리 시대에서는 스마트폰을 가진 누구나 즉시 사진을 찍고 공유할 수 있기 때문에 전문 사진작가의 중요성을 의문시하는 사람들이 있습니다. 이에 대해 저는 새로운 접근성이 전문 사진작가의 중요성을 줄인다는것에 부분적으로 동의하지 않습니다.
섬세한 스마트폰 카메라의 확산은 무조건적으로 개인들에게 그들의 세계를 포착하는 능력을 부여했지만, 이로 인해 전문 사진작가가 불필요하다는 믿음을 일부 사람들에게 심었습니다. 기술 회사들은 품질 높은 이미지를 찍고 싶은 소비자의 욕구에 어필하기 위해 점점 발전된 카메라를 제공합니다. 하지만, 전문 사진술의 복잡성은 폰 카메라의 범위를 넘어갑니다. 예를 들어, 야생동물 사진술을 포착하는 것은 일반 스마트폰을 훨씬 능가하는 줌 기능을 필요로 합니다. 이러한 특수한 상황들은 전문 사진작가의 전문성과 장비를 요구하며, 단순한 스마트폰으로는 이를 대체할 수 없습니다.
게다가, 사진술은 올바른 장비뿐 아니라 재능, 기술, 지식을 요구하는 다면적인 예술입니다. 스마트폰 사용자들이 가족 모임이나 풍경을 사진찍을 수는 있지만, 장면의 본질이나 사건을 정확하게 담아낼 수 있는 사진은 전문 사진작가의 영역입니다. 그들의 훈련과 경험은 수십 년의 훈련을 받아 사랑 받는 대중적인 이미지를 초월하기 위해 필요한 것입니다.
결론적으로, 고품질 스마트폰 카메라의 등장이 사진술을 어느 정도 균등하게 만들었지만, 전문 사진작가의 중요성은 전혀 사라지지 않았습니다. 그들의 지식, 기술, 그리고 독특한 시각은 우리 세상의 매혹적인 이미지를 만들어내는 데 있어 여전히 대체 불가능합니다.
Good expressions:
1. proliferate - 확산되다
2. intricacies - 복잡성
3. multilayered art - 다면적인 예술
4. democratise - 균등하게 하다
5. distinctive perspective - 독특한 시각
6. irreplaceable - 대체 불가능하다
제출한 라이팅
Nowadays photos which was taken by smartphones have a great quality that many individuals may think that there is no need the professional photographers in this high-tech era.
In this modern world companies compete to each other through innovative ways. Smartphones companies add some options in cameras to encourage customers to buy their product, however cameras are being progressed every day and they become more complicated to take a high-quality photo. For example, nobody can take a wildlife photograph just with a phone because a wildlife photographer uses a camera with zoom capability of almost 200 times higher than a phone.
Furthermore, photography is a kind of art, so it need a talent and enough knowledge. Individuals who have smartphones can take photos from their families or nature, however it does not mean they take a standard photo. Professional photographers have many years experienced and also educated in this field so that they can take a justifiable photo that everyone admires it.
Some might argue that some smartphones are capable to take photos even better than cameras, although that photos are better because they only look good on that mobile phone and when they are printed they cannot compete to camera ones.
In conclusion, while some people believe that smartphone can decrease the value of photographer occupation, I think that cameras are still better than phones as well as photography needs knowledge and talent, so the society need photography in a professional way.
In this modern world companies compete to each other through innovative ways. Smartphones companies add some options in cameras to encourage customers to buy their product, however cameras are being progressed every day and they become more complicated to take a high-quality photo. For example, nobody can take a wildlife photograph just with a phone because a wildlife photographer uses a camera with zoom capability of almost 200 times higher than a phone.
Furthermore, photography is a kind of art, so it need a talent and enough knowledge. Individuals who have smartphones can take photos from their families or nature, however it does not mean they take a standard photo. Professional photographers have many years experienced and also educated in this field so that they can take a justifiable photo that everyone admires it.
Some might argue that some smartphones are capable to take photos even better than cameras, although that photos are better because they only look good on that mobile phone and when they are printed they cannot compete to camera ones.
In conclusion, while some people believe that smartphone can decrease the value of photographer occupation, I think that cameras are still better than phones as well as photography needs knowledge and talent, so the society need photography in a professional way.
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