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- Two parts
In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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Evaluation
Task Response: 5.5
The student attempts to answer the question, providing a personal experience and opinion. They offer reasons for both sides of the argument but their stance lacks clarity and focus. Some ideas are underdeveloped, while others could be expanded for better understanding.
Coherence & Cohesion: 6
The essay reasonably organises information and ideas, using some cohesive devices. However, some transitions are awkward, and points are not well-connected or arranged clearly.
Lexical Resource: 6
A good range of vocabulary is used, including some sophisticated words and phrases. Minor errors and awkward word choice occur, but it does not significantly hinder understanding.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentences but includes numerous grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. The use of punctuation and capitalization is inconsistent, affecting the readability of the text.
Overall: 5.6
Task Response: 5.5
The student attempts to answer the question, providing a personal experience and opinion. They offer reasons for both sides of the argument but their stance lacks clarity and focus. Some ideas are underdeveloped, while others could be expanded for better understanding.
Coherence & Cohesion: 6
The essay reasonably organises information and ideas, using some cohesive devices. However, some transitions are awkward, and points are not well-connected or arranged clearly.
Lexical Resource: 6
A good range of vocabulary is used, including some sophisticated words and phrases. Minor errors and awkward word choice occur, but it does not significantly hinder understanding.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: 5
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentences but includes numerous grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. The use of punctuation and capitalization is inconsistent, affecting the readability of the text.
Overall: 5.6
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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Essay:
Significant advancement has transpired in the world around us, strongly influencing our ways of life, particularly our reading habits. The digital surge has made it possible to access an array of content online, prompting a debate on the relevance of printed newspapers and books in the future.
Characterized by portability and convenience, digital devices have become a popular medium for reading. With the ability to access numerous books and articles through devices such as mobile phones and e-books, many choose this method for its ease and minimalism. There's a crucial ecological advantage too, as transitioning to digital reduces the need for paper, thus conserving our forests. Therefore, it is understandable why many believe that the printed medium may eventually become obsolete.
Despite the convenience digital reading provides, it isn't devoid of flaws. Digitally consumed text often hampers readability and strains the eyes, leaving some readers yearning for traditional printed books. Sensing the feel of a book, turning actual pages, and the joy of owning a physical copy are sentiments integral to reading for many, that digital platforms fail to replicate. This preference for the tactile experience of reading, reflected in the persistent existence of brick-and-mortar bookstores, suggests that print is far from disappearing.
To conclude, while digital platforms provide a convenient alterative to print, it appears unlikely that they will completely replace physical newspapers and books. The traditional reading experience, cherished by many, is likely to persist in parallel to digital reading sources.
Word count: 260
Essay translated in Korean:
주위 세계에서는 중요한 발전이 이루어졌고, 특히 우리의 읽기 습관에 큰 영향을 미쳤습니다. 디지털 서지가 가능하게 하여 온라인으로 다양한 콘텐츠를 접근하는 것이 가능하게 되어서 인쇄된 신문과 책의 미래의 적절성에 대한 논의를 일으켰습니다.
휴대성과 편의성을 가진 디지털 장치들은 읽기용 매체로 인기가 있습니다. 휴대폰과 전자 책과 같은 장치를 통해 수많은 책과 기사에 접근할 수 있기 때문에 많은 사람들이 이 방법을 선택합니다. 중요한 환경적 이점도 있는데, 디지털로 전환함으로써 종이의 필요성을 줄여서 우리의 숲을 보존하는 것입니다. 따라서 왜 많은 사람들이 인쇄 매체가 결국에는 없어질 것이라고 믿는지 이해할 수 있습니다.
디지털 독서가 제공하는 편의에도 불구하고, 결점이 없는 것은 아닙니다. 디지털로 소비되는 텍스트는 종종 가독성을 저해하고 눈을 피로하게 만들어 일부 독자들이 전통적으로 인쇄된 책을 갈망하게 만듭니다. 책의 느낌, 실제 페이지를 넘기는 것, 실제 사본을 소유하는 기쁨은 많은 사람들에게 중요한 감정이며, 이는 디지털 플랫폼이 복제하지 못합니다. 이러한 촉각적인 독서 경험에 대한 선호도는 벽돌과 회바르 게이트서점의 지속적인 존재에서 반영되어 있어, 인쇄가 사라지는 것은 아닌 것 같습니다.
결론적으로 말하면, 디지털 플랫폼이 인쇄에 대한 편리한 대체제를 제공하지만, 그것이 완전히 물리적 신문과 책을 대체할 것으로 보이지는 않습니다. 많은 사람들이 소중히 여기는 전통적인 독서 경험은 디지털 독서 자료와 병행하여 지속될 가능성이 있는 것 같습니다.
Good expressions:
1. "Significant advancement has transpired" - "중요한 발전이 일어났습니다"
2. "digital surge has made it possible" - "디지털 서지가 가능하게 하였다"
3. "crippling flaw" - "결정적인 결함"
4. "tactile experience of reading" - "촉각적인 독서 경험"
5. "cherished by many" - "많은 사람들에게 소중히 여겨지다"
Significant advancement has transpired in the world around us, strongly influencing our ways of life, particularly our reading habits. The digital surge has made it possible to access an array of content online, prompting a debate on the relevance of printed newspapers and books in the future.
Characterized by portability and convenience, digital devices have become a popular medium for reading. With the ability to access numerous books and articles through devices such as mobile phones and e-books, many choose this method for its ease and minimalism. There's a crucial ecological advantage too, as transitioning to digital reduces the need for paper, thus conserving our forests. Therefore, it is understandable why many believe that the printed medium may eventually become obsolete.
Despite the convenience digital reading provides, it isn't devoid of flaws. Digitally consumed text often hampers readability and strains the eyes, leaving some readers yearning for traditional printed books. Sensing the feel of a book, turning actual pages, and the joy of owning a physical copy are sentiments integral to reading for many, that digital platforms fail to replicate. This preference for the tactile experience of reading, reflected in the persistent existence of brick-and-mortar bookstores, suggests that print is far from disappearing.
To conclude, while digital platforms provide a convenient alterative to print, it appears unlikely that they will completely replace physical newspapers and books. The traditional reading experience, cherished by many, is likely to persist in parallel to digital reading sources.
Word count: 260
Essay translated in Korean:
주위 세계에서는 중요한 발전이 이루어졌고, 특히 우리의 읽기 습관에 큰 영향을 미쳤습니다. 디지털 서지가 가능하게 하여 온라인으로 다양한 콘텐츠를 접근하는 것이 가능하게 되어서 인쇄된 신문과 책의 미래의 적절성에 대한 논의를 일으켰습니다.
휴대성과 편의성을 가진 디지털 장치들은 읽기용 매체로 인기가 있습니다. 휴대폰과 전자 책과 같은 장치를 통해 수많은 책과 기사에 접근할 수 있기 때문에 많은 사람들이 이 방법을 선택합니다. 중요한 환경적 이점도 있는데, 디지털로 전환함으로써 종이의 필요성을 줄여서 우리의 숲을 보존하는 것입니다. 따라서 왜 많은 사람들이 인쇄 매체가 결국에는 없어질 것이라고 믿는지 이해할 수 있습니다.
디지털 독서가 제공하는 편의에도 불구하고, 결점이 없는 것은 아닙니다. 디지털로 소비되는 텍스트는 종종 가독성을 저해하고 눈을 피로하게 만들어 일부 독자들이 전통적으로 인쇄된 책을 갈망하게 만듭니다. 책의 느낌, 실제 페이지를 넘기는 것, 실제 사본을 소유하는 기쁨은 많은 사람들에게 중요한 감정이며, 이는 디지털 플랫폼이 복제하지 못합니다. 이러한 촉각적인 독서 경험에 대한 선호도는 벽돌과 회바르 게이트서점의 지속적인 존재에서 반영되어 있어, 인쇄가 사라지는 것은 아닌 것 같습니다.
결론적으로 말하면, 디지털 플랫폼이 인쇄에 대한 편리한 대체제를 제공하지만, 그것이 완전히 물리적 신문과 책을 대체할 것으로 보이지는 않습니다. 많은 사람들이 소중히 여기는 전통적인 독서 경험은 디지털 독서 자료와 병행하여 지속될 가능성이 있는 것 같습니다.
Good expressions:
1. "Significant advancement has transpired" - "중요한 발전이 일어났습니다"
2. "digital surge has made it possible" - "디지털 서지가 가능하게 하였다"
3. "crippling flaw" - "결정적인 결함"
4. "tactile experience of reading" - "촉각적인 독서 경험"
5. "cherished by many" - "많은 사람들에게 소중히 여겨지다"
제출한 라이팅
In the world, many of things have changed rapidly. It affects in many different means.
Rapidly changing the world affects to form diverse shapes. And one of the result is that we can find anything on website nowadays, such as articles and books. So it already comes close to us to approach newspapers or books online, and we are in the middle of changes.
In fact, many people read books on the phone or their own device like e-book, and i was one of them. Apparently there are lots of people prefer to read in that way, because that's easy, light, and convenience. They can read it anywhere and anytime, even they are free from weight of books from carrying them all the time. Additionally I chose that for eco-friendly conduct, one day I realised i had too many books and it required many woods for making books, even I felt they are burden for every move.
However reading with equipment was not always good. It disrupted readability and made eyes tired very soon. I felt losing interesting online books, and i came back to read with paper books. The feeling was very pleasure, i haven't feel it for a long time. I think that's why others prefer to read p-books. Conclusionally i'd like to disagree about that in the future, people would not buy books or newspapers. At least in books, some of them would insist to keep it in the original way to read. It's the evidence there are still lots of bookstores in everywhere, and the proportions of markets between online and offline would be similar.
Rapidly changing the world affects to form diverse shapes. And one of the result is that we can find anything on website nowadays, such as articles and books. So it already comes close to us to approach newspapers or books online, and we are in the middle of changes.
In fact, many people read books on the phone or their own device like e-book, and i was one of them. Apparently there are lots of people prefer to read in that way, because that's easy, light, and convenience. They can read it anywhere and anytime, even they are free from weight of books from carrying them all the time. Additionally I chose that for eco-friendly conduct, one day I realised i had too many books and it required many woods for making books, even I felt they are burden for every move.
However reading with equipment was not always good. It disrupted readability and made eyes tired very soon. I felt losing interesting online books, and i came back to read with paper books. The feeling was very pleasure, i haven't feel it for a long time. I think that's why others prefer to read p-books. Conclusionally i'd like to disagree about that in the future, people would not buy books or newspapers. At least in books, some of them would insist to keep it in the original way to read. It's the evidence there are still lots of bookstores in everywhere, and the proportions of markets between online and offline would be similar.
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