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- Opinion
companies have to adviertising. agree of disagree and give your opinion
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Evaluation
Task Response: [6]
The essay does provide an answer to the task, but the student has misinterpreted the question slightly. The task does not ask whether or not advertising is beneficial but whether companies have to advertise. Despite this, the writer does provide clear arguments that relate to the benefits of advertising for both companies and a nation’s economy. There are arguments for the benefits of advertising and examples given to support these points, which fulfils part of the task requirement.
Coherence & Cohesion: [6]
The essay has logical organization and clear progression from one idea to the next. The introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion are identifiable, use of linking words is adequate. However, some sentence strings are difficult to follow and understand due to inappropriate sentence structure. Overall, the ideas are related, but some improvement in connecting paragraphs could be made.
Lexical Resource: [5]
The student uses a range of vocabulary, although there are some errors, notably the misspelling of "advertising". Confusion between singular and plural nouns also detracts from the understanding. A bit more variety in vocabulary and attention to accuracy would improve this score.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: [5]
The essay shows a level of grammatical complexity, but there are quite a few grammatical errors throughout that make comprehension difficult in places. The main issues are with punctuation, sentence structure and incorrect verb tenses.
Overall: [5.5]
The essay manages to address the task, albeit not directly, with logical development of ideas supported by examples. However, the grammatical mistakes and limited vocabulary used bring down the overall score. It's advisable for the student to revise common verb forms and work on punctuation, spelling and proper sentence structure. Going beyond basic vocabulary can also bring a higher score.
Task Response: [6]
The essay does provide an answer to the task, but the student has misinterpreted the question slightly. The task does not ask whether or not advertising is beneficial but whether companies have to advertise. Despite this, the writer does provide clear arguments that relate to the benefits of advertising for both companies and a nation’s economy. There are arguments for the benefits of advertising and examples given to support these points, which fulfils part of the task requirement.
Coherence & Cohesion: [6]
The essay has logical organization and clear progression from one idea to the next. The introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion are identifiable, use of linking words is adequate. However, some sentence strings are difficult to follow and understand due to inappropriate sentence structure. Overall, the ideas are related, but some improvement in connecting paragraphs could be made.
Lexical Resource: [5]
The student uses a range of vocabulary, although there are some errors, notably the misspelling of "advertising". Confusion between singular and plural nouns also detracts from the understanding. A bit more variety in vocabulary and attention to accuracy would improve this score.
Grammatical Range & Accuracy: [5]
The essay shows a level of grammatical complexity, but there are quite a few grammatical errors throughout that make comprehension difficult in places. The main issues are with punctuation, sentence structure and incorrect verb tenses.
Overall: [5.5]
The essay manages to address the task, albeit not directly, with logical development of ideas supported by examples. However, the grammatical mistakes and limited vocabulary used bring down the overall score. It's advisable for the student to revise common verb forms and work on punctuation, spelling and proper sentence structure. Going beyond basic vocabulary can also bring a higher score.
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companies have to adviertising. agree of disagree and give your opinion
Essay:
The question of whether it's essential for firms to invest in advertising is indeed a matter of intense debate. In my view, I wholeheartedly endorse the assertion for a myriad of reasons.
Initially, it is undeniable that advertising can set in motion substantial growth for both companies and countries. This is primarily because effective publicity can accentuate a firm's offerings, thereby enhancing consumer awareness. This invariably might translate into a greater consumer demand, stimulating not just corporate expansion but also socioeconomic prosperity. Hyundai Group in South Korea serves as an apt exemplar here. Through relentless promotion of their diverse offerings, they play a pivotal role in their national economy.
Simultaneously, the advertising industry could considerably augment employment opportunities. This claim emanates from understanding the creative and labor-intensive nature of the advertising industry. As businesses expand due to the influence of advertisements, their staffing requirements would naturally increase, thus reducing the unemployment rate. Absence of such marketing strategies could potentially augment joblessness, making ad agencies indispensable to the job market and a country's economic stature.
In conclusion, it's highly beneficial for corporations to allocate resources for advertising. Personally, I remain resolute in advocating for this standpoint.
Word count: 221
Essay translated in Korean:
회사가 광고에 투자해야 하는지 여부는 실제로 치열한 논쟁의 대상입니다. 제 견해로, 저는 여러 가지 이유로 이주장을 전적으로 지지합니다.
처음으로, 광고는 회사와 국가에 대한 상당한 성장을 유발할 수 있다는 것은 부인할 수 없습니다. 이는 주로 효과적인 선전으로 회사의 제공을 부각시키어 소비자 인식을 향상시킬 수 있기 때문입니다. 이로 인해 소비자 수요가 크게 증가할 수 있으며, 이는 단지 기업의 확장을 촉진하는 것뿐만 아니라 사회경제적 번영을 촉진할 수 있습니다. 여기에는 남한의 현대그룹이 적절한 예시가 될 수 있습니다. 그들은 다양한 제공을 끊임없이 홍보함으로써 국가경제에서 중추적 역할을 합니다.
동시에, 광고 산업은 고용 기회를 상당히 늘릴 수 있습니다. 이 주장은 광고 산업이 창의적이고 노동 집약적인 성격을 이해함으로써 비롯된 것입니다. 광고의 영향으로 비즈니스가 확장되면 필연적으로 그들의 스태프 요구가 증가할 것이므로 실업률을 감소시킵니다. 이러한 마케팅 전략이 없으면 실업률이 증가할 수 있기 때문에, 광고 대행사는 직업 시장과 국가의 경제적 지위에 있어서 없어서는 안될 것입니다.
결론적으로, 기업이 광고를 위한 자원을 할애하는 것은 매우 유익합니다. 개인적으로, 저는 이 견해를 옹호하는 데에 확고합니다.
Good expressions:
1. set in motion: 활동시키다
2. accentuate: 강조하다
3. translate into: ~로 변환되다
4. relentless promotion: 끊임없는 홍보
5. pivotal role: 중추적인 역할
6. augment: 늘리다
7. Indispensable: 없어서는 안 될.
The question of whether it's essential for firms to invest in advertising is indeed a matter of intense debate. In my view, I wholeheartedly endorse the assertion for a myriad of reasons.
Initially, it is undeniable that advertising can set in motion substantial growth for both companies and countries. This is primarily because effective publicity can accentuate a firm's offerings, thereby enhancing consumer awareness. This invariably might translate into a greater consumer demand, stimulating not just corporate expansion but also socioeconomic prosperity. Hyundai Group in South Korea serves as an apt exemplar here. Through relentless promotion of their diverse offerings, they play a pivotal role in their national economy.
Simultaneously, the advertising industry could considerably augment employment opportunities. This claim emanates from understanding the creative and labor-intensive nature of the advertising industry. As businesses expand due to the influence of advertisements, their staffing requirements would naturally increase, thus reducing the unemployment rate. Absence of such marketing strategies could potentially augment joblessness, making ad agencies indispensable to the job market and a country's economic stature.
In conclusion, it's highly beneficial for corporations to allocate resources for advertising. Personally, I remain resolute in advocating for this standpoint.
Word count: 221
Essay translated in Korean:
회사가 광고에 투자해야 하는지 여부는 실제로 치열한 논쟁의 대상입니다. 제 견해로, 저는 여러 가지 이유로 이주장을 전적으로 지지합니다.
처음으로, 광고는 회사와 국가에 대한 상당한 성장을 유발할 수 있다는 것은 부인할 수 없습니다. 이는 주로 효과적인 선전으로 회사의 제공을 부각시키어 소비자 인식을 향상시킬 수 있기 때문입니다. 이로 인해 소비자 수요가 크게 증가할 수 있으며, 이는 단지 기업의 확장을 촉진하는 것뿐만 아니라 사회경제적 번영을 촉진할 수 있습니다. 여기에는 남한의 현대그룹이 적절한 예시가 될 수 있습니다. 그들은 다양한 제공을 끊임없이 홍보함으로써 국가경제에서 중추적 역할을 합니다.
동시에, 광고 산업은 고용 기회를 상당히 늘릴 수 있습니다. 이 주장은 광고 산업이 창의적이고 노동 집약적인 성격을 이해함으로써 비롯된 것입니다. 광고의 영향으로 비즈니스가 확장되면 필연적으로 그들의 스태프 요구가 증가할 것이므로 실업률을 감소시킵니다. 이러한 마케팅 전략이 없으면 실업률이 증가할 수 있기 때문에, 광고 대행사는 직업 시장과 국가의 경제적 지위에 있어서 없어서는 안될 것입니다.
결론적으로, 기업이 광고를 위한 자원을 할애하는 것은 매우 유익합니다. 개인적으로, 저는 이 견해를 옹호하는 데에 확고합니다.
Good expressions:
1. set in motion: 활동시키다
2. accentuate: 강조하다
3. translate into: ~로 변환되다
4. relentless promotion: 끊임없는 홍보
5. pivotal role: 중추적인 역할
6. augment: 늘리다
7. Indispensable: 없어서는 안 될.
제출한 라이팅
it is commonly argued that companies have to advertising . And this is the most controversial issues that people like to debating about . In my opinion, I strongly agree with this point of view and there are some reasons.
On the one hand, advertisinng can bring a significant develop to a country. This is because, advertising is beneficial in the short run and also long run due to they stand out their company by promoting their productsand services. Accordingly, it may result in increasing demand since they promotes consumption.In addition, it leads to not only development of an organization but also economic growth of a nation. A good illustration of this is Hyundai Group in Korea, they are playing an significantly important role in Korean’s economic statement through continous promotion of their business, products, devices and technologies.
On the other hand, advertising can extremely improve an employment prospects.The reason behind this is simple, advertisements are creative industry that promoting demand and create a large number of jobs. This is due to the fact Industry and organisation can considerably develop, then they should have more people and unemployment rate decreases naturally. However, there will be higher unemployment rate without advertisement. As a result, it helps both one’s career and employment of a nation .For this reason, I firmly believe that countries should promote their business widely.
To conclude, some might argue that its important for companies to advertise. All things considered, I would strongly argue in favor of the opinion.
On the one hand, advertisinng can bring a significant develop to a country. This is because, advertising is beneficial in the short run and also long run due to they stand out their company by promoting their productsand services. Accordingly, it may result in increasing demand since they promotes consumption.In addition, it leads to not only development of an organization but also economic growth of a nation. A good illustration of this is Hyundai Group in Korea, they are playing an significantly important role in Korean’s economic statement through continous promotion of their business, products, devices and technologies.
On the other hand, advertising can extremely improve an employment prospects.The reason behind this is simple, advertisements are creative industry that promoting demand and create a large number of jobs. This is due to the fact Industry and organisation can considerably develop, then they should have more people and unemployment rate decreases naturally. However, there will be higher unemployment rate without advertisement. As a result, it helps both one’s career and employment of a nation .For this reason, I firmly believe that countries should promote their business widely.
To conclude, some might argue that its important for companies to advertise. All things considered, I would strongly argue in favor of the opinion.
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