The table illustrates the percentage of school children attending four different types of secondary school from 2000 to 2009. It is evident that whereas the community schools experienced a marked increase in the proportion of those attending their institutions over the period, the others saw a corresponding decline.

To begin, the percentage of pupils in voluntary-controlled schools fell from just over half to only 20% or one fifth from 2000 to 2009. Similarly, the relative number of children in grammar schools - just under one quarter - dropped by half in the same period. As for the specialist schools, the relatively small percentage of pupils attending this type of school (12%) also fell, although not significantly.

However, while the other three types of school declined in importance, the opposite was true in the case of community schools. In fact, whereas only a small minority of 12% were educated in these schools in 2000, this figure increased to well over half of all pupils during the following nine years.

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• 오버뷰가 명확하고 주요한 추세를 보여줌
• 데이터가 명확하고 일관성있게 정리됨: 처음에는 출석수 감소가 있는 학교들을 설명하고 그 다음에 증가가 있는 학교들을 설명
• 복잡한 문장들과 구조를 사용: 
  whereas the community schools...
  the relatively small percentage of pupils attending this type of school (12%) also fell...
  while the other three types of school...
• 숫자와 변화를 다양하게 표현
  just over half to only 20% or one fifth from
  this figure increased to well over half of all pupils